Like Romeo and Juliet

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Like Romeo and Juliet,
Our love is one I can not bet.
Eyes that subdue me with ease,
A voice as soft as the ocean breeze.
Hair the color of grain and gold,
A personality so lovely and bold.
Full of beauty is her face,
She makes life a better place.
The feeling of your hand in mine,
Brings tranquility so divine.
Life is a market,
And my heart was on sale.
You bought it as it was frail,
Promise you'll stay with me.
Without you life is a tragedy,
When we kiss I go back to when we met.
This Romeo has found his Juliet.

Reviews

[Anjali]

Wow, I loved your poem and the rhymes as well.

[Annie]

I love it! Brilliant write, so cute. c: The only thing I might add is instead of, "She makes life a better place," add, "She makes my life etc..." Great job!

[Ice Girl]

i like it!