1:00 AM Routine

I don't know where this came from or how it happened

(a)i never feel 

half as beautiful

as i do in 

my bathroom at

1:00 AM

untying my curls

and saying my prayers

(b)except maybe a handful of seconds later

when i pull back the covers on

my side of the bed

and you are disturbed from your

almost-slumber

but you still turn your 

head from the pillow and grin 

as your eyes fall on me

and i fall on you

Reviews

[Brian]

Very good and romantic poem! One thing I'm having trouble understanding is the format of the a) and b) section. Could you explain to me why you choose to write it that way please :) I get frustrated when I can't interpret something haha

[Oceana]

Well thank you. And I saw the separation thing in a book containing works from young writers. I thought it was new and interesting, and very creative, and I thought I could apply it here- what with the two different thoughts going on here.

[Entropy of the mind]

Gorgeous and romantic.
Normally I hate romantic poems (Its just cause of the slump I am in currently) but this one was beautiful. Great wording, I get this image in my head of the bedroom dimly lit and you and your lover are just gazing at each other loving, then you intertwine and falls back asleep in each others arms, nothing matters at that moment except you and your lover.
perfect.
I think I shall go write a love poem now, just cause this inspired me
thanks :)

[Oceana]

Aw, I'm sorry to hear that. But I'm glad I could change your mind for at least a little while. Thank you so much, girl!

[Mir]

Awe, this is so cute! And romantic! :) I love poems like this. Definitely one of my favorites on here!! :D

[Oceana]

Aw, thank you so much dear

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what a wonderful routine...that comfort felt just at a look...even the sleepy ones...

and in this poem, one thing is shown...that look is given, that look of love, when we have taken off the masks, the make-up...and we get down to our bare selves...

and are still accepted.

really good write.

jacob

[Coyote Poetry]

At 1 am. I wake up my wife. I may get a kick in the head. I like the lead in of the poem leading to a positive ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Angi]

Nothing makes me feel as beautiful as my man's eyes lighting on me, too. In the rush of things, that is the heart of it all.

[ChemicalMadness]

Interesting. I'm left with a lot of questions here, which is not always a bad thing....

Why is the speaker up at 1:00 on a recurring basis? Why is she untying curls - how old is she? What of the prayers?

If it's "my" bathroom, who's sleeping in your bed? There are a lot of possessives at play here, which make me question the "you" in the piece. Who is he?

I love the voice of the speaker. I'm intrigued by the a), b)......but I feel this is an incomplete story. Perhaps it's a storyboard for a piece - that's really how I see it. But that's just me. Others may find this to stand on its own just fine.

CM.