Rain

This is a random spur of the moment poem I put together

Rain

In the dark, I see your shadow creep across my veins, 

there is no sun, I smile at the sound of rain.

Purity of silence pierces my heart, 

a meaningless love, complex like art.

theft of my innocence, left me buried and cold,

rising is more than just standing on my own two feet.

It's not rewind or stop, its simply delete,

You don't belong in my memory.

It's like you stole pieces of my brain,

I don't believe in sane, buried and cold I'll remain.

Smiling, to the sound of rain.

Reviews

[PJ]

I Love this poem. Great job :)

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Powerful imagery, great rhythm, and great expressions! An awesome job. :)

[closed..acct]

Wow awesome piece of poetry,
excellent flow & rhyme scheme.

[Luke Ritta]

the images along with the rhyming was really mice..keep up the good work!

[Tim]

Very nicely done with nice rhythm and words.

[DarkLovingRaven]

This is a wonderful piece of ink you wrote here! I love the rhyming and structure! I like the emotion contrast from the beginning to the end! Great write, dear! This is a wonderful, simple, poem you have here.

[eatmills]

Effin love this. (Sorry for the outburst; I've drank too much coffee today.)

The structure is great in it's stature. The metaphors are incredible. I loved the play on this line, "I don't believe in sane..."

Welcome to Writer'sCafe.

-eatmills

[hmm]

Love the amazing rhyme scheme and flow,
Powerful feelings. Enjoyed this muchly!