Temptation

Been away from reading, reviewing an writing ... Now I am back .. Missed you all. Freestyle poetry

Temptation

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Temptation urged me closer,

   his hips swaying smoothly

with each undulating beat.

Upon his lips my eyes fixated, 

like a string to a red balloon.

My body filled with heat;

I couldn't pull away.

He did not see me

through the screaming crowd.

Moving free ~

music loud

lost under his spell.

Sweat glistened over his body …

like dew drops shimmering

on soft, glimmering rose petals;

 I could smell sweetness.

Our eyes met ~ as tho’ we were one,

fell into a trance, yet;

  sultry rhythms took over … 

to his song, I began to dance along.

Without warning, the music stopped!

Off the stage my love leapt,

kissed me tenderly, as

"temptation" swept

us away....!

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Author's Note

If you happen to read my poem I would appreciate a review. I always review everything I read.
Thank you,
Lisa

Reviews

[Soren]

What a sensual poem so well composed with intriguing internal rhyme and great build up. I usually am not drawn to this topic area but this is an exception that I would have to rank as a most wonderful poem that I would read over and over. Such good taste in its presentation and such emotion that I could feel deep inside. Congratulations on this write Lisa

[Lisasview]

Hi Soren,
This is the first poem I have posted in quite sometime as I fell and broke several bones...long story, so I could not type.
When I write this type of poem I always keep it on the sensual side...not "dirty" so that everyone can enjoy it...
I am thrilled that you decided to give my poem a try...
I am so humbled by your beautiful review,
Thank you,
Lisa

[andrew mitchell]

A romantic gem which reminds me of those Hollywood movies boy meets girl or girl meets boy in the maddening crowd. Very nicely formatted.

[Lisasview]

Oh my goodness a third review... Wow weeee..
I realised last year that I enjoyed writing sensuous
poetry as well as other styles.
So nice of you to use the kind word "Gem"
Probably the fact that I grew up In Hollywood, Ca... had a lot to do with the way I think...
Lisa

[Arundass TP]

Interesting line's. Loved it's emotions description. Good work 👍

[Lisasview]

Good morning Arundass,
Please forgive me or not responding sooner.
I had a couple of bad fans last year and could not use my right arm, etc. So I fell behind in writing, reading and reviewing.
I am back to it now as I am home recovering from a new knee.
Glad you enjoyed my poem... the fact that you find it interesting means a lot..
Lisa

[Arundass TP]

Thanks for writing. Praying for quicker recovery from accident. Expect for more creative writing of yours. Have a nice day

[Lisasview]

Oh I did not have an accident... just a new knee..
Thank you for your kind response.
Lisa

[Tate Morgan]

Oh the loves we have led. The concerts the music However rarely it does both. I had a friend the other day look into booking 6 tickets to Taylor Swift. $29,000 insane i pity the generation we leave behind Never to know what it was to be truly moved.

[Lisasview]

How nice to hear from you... When I first read your first line, I had to mull it over... I was thinking LOVES... but then I realised you meant LIVES...Yes, we are the lucky generation.
Gosh tickets for the Beatles at the Hollywood Bowl were probably $8.00... seemed like a lot to us then.... But goodness, $29,000 for Taylor Swift is ridiculous,,,
I so agree with your comments...
What did you mean by this sentence...The concerts the music However rarely it does both.
Lisa

[Tate Morgan]

That’s what happens when I speak to my phone and it copy my voice. It doesn’t get it right all the time I apologize.

[Lisasview]

No worries, just tried to make sense of it.
By the way did you see the Elton John movie on Net Flex? It was so good.
Lisa

[Tate Morgan]

I have not

[Lisasview]

On Netflix... well worth the watch... So enjoyable Tate.
Lisa

[Tate Morgan]

I’ll take a look

[Lisasview]

Yes, do...

[Ken e Bujold]

ah yes, tempted by the fruit of another. Man's blessing, if somewhat cursed by times, since we first took to wandering through Eden.

lovely poem Lisa

[Lisasview]

Hi there stranger, I say that because I have been away due to bone breaks for quite sometime!
Connection is what it is all about...right..
Lisasview

[Ken e Bujold]

bone breaks, sounds painful. hope all is well, or returning to well

[Lisasview]

Yes, clavicle first then a month later 3 ribs..Still trying to get my muscles back where they were..
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

Divinely sensual and so vivid , I love the red print, goes perfectly with poem… from beginning to end everything fits perfectly, and then a surprise ending which tops it off so well…loved every line Kisa and the rhyme as well…
Warmly, B
PS glad you’re all healed

[Lisasview]

Thank you Betty, still in physical therapy and there still is some pain... Hate not being 100% myself.
Glad you enjoyed my newest poem.
Hoping to write more.
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome Lisa!
PS I have a impingement in my shoulder so I empathize with you!

[Lorry]

Well I must say Lisa, I am shocked, appalled and not a little perplexed. I mean, when have you ever read anything where men treat woman like bits of meat..... Oh, wait a minute... We do, don't we? Me bad!
Anyway, as I was saying, another wonderful write and more power to your pen 😊

[Lisasview]

When I began to read your review my heart sank!! I was of course upset...
First, of all I completely disagree with your statement.
Obviously she knew this guy ~ her lover, and came in late to the club and went back with him to their home.
Anyway, then I read the rest of your review... saying wonderful write...so now I do feel better.
Lisa

[William Michael Reeves]

Your love was a star. He lept off the stage to body surf right into your life. This poem felt primal to me. I imagined all the bodies swaying in the ritual of rhythm. Uninhibited screaming and sweating ... and lusting. My oh my!!

[Lisasview]

Thank you Michael so much for reading and reviewing. Love your words... "body surf right into your life"
I need to find time to read more and write more.
Lisa

[Coyote Poetry]

A wonderful and beautiful poem shared dear Lisa.
"Without warning, the music stopped!
Off the stage my love leapt,
kissed me tenderly, as
"temptation" swept"
I adored the above lines. I do like a happy ending. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
us away.

[Lisasview]

I love happy endings too!!
Love writing about romance...
Thank you for your very positive review dearest Coyote,
Lisa, afternoon in Spain

[Coyote Poetry]

Good afternoon dear Lisa from Michigan and you are welcome.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Lisa, you created a heat filled ambience here with your free verse stanzas and in the pictures that formed inside my mind. A fantasy with a happy ending. So good to read a post from you again. Hope you are healing well after your falls. Take care dear poet. 🌺

Chris

[Lisasview]

Dear Chris,
Thank you so much for reading my newest poem.
It has been awful being away for so long Chris. I am better but not perfect.
I lost so weight and so much muscle tone which is a drag.I was already pretty slim but now... oh well...
I really enjoyed writing this one ...
Lisa

[Chris Shaw]

Look after yourself Lisa. Pleased to see a new post from you :)