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101

A Poem by paparapapa
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This is like a sequel to my poem "100 Days With You." So please read that first before reading this. Thank you. :)

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101

 

A hundred and one days,

Finally, I’m out of your maze.

But as my grays looked up so high,

Glistening, a tear’s stuck on my eye.

 

For hundred days, you made me feel,

That you, my dream, can be so real.

Between us, hardly a word was spoken,

But your eyes defied everything, heart was awoken.

 

But with just a snap of the world’s finger,

Forbid my feelings for you to linger.

Yes, you had a change of heart,

Your world, sadly, I wasn’t a part.

 

Now I ask you, did you have fun?

Toying my heart like a child’s water gun.

If yes, then answer this one little thing,

Can you say that a bit of happiness I did bring?

 

Well, for you, maybe it wasn’t intentional,

To make me feel as if I was someone special.

Your hands veiled my already poor eyesight,

Because now I know I’ve never been Ms. Right.

 

For hundred days, it had only been her,

The one who made your everything blur.

Tell me, oh tell me, can you still be mine?

I know I’m no her, but lie to me that it’s fine.

 

A hundred and one has come and gone by.

If this the end of nonexistent you and I,

Then make it easy, make me hate you so,

Teach me, my love, the art of letting go.

© 2011 paparapapa


Author's Note

paparapapa
It would have been so much better if you just said it straight...

The feel of this poem is totally different from the first one. So I'm sorry if you thought that this would have a happy feeling to it like that of "100 Days With You." Please do comment though. :)

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Both this piece and the previous speak of life, love and the roller coaster that exists with our journey's dynamic existence on this Earth. I don't think you could have set up either one any better or any different, for they capture time, your emotions, joys and frustrations and allow them to run across the silver screen of our minds.
The only suggestion I could make would be about the second line in the last stanza of this piece... It thought it might sound a bit better as, "If this is the end..." IDK.. just my opinion.
Over all both of the pieces were well crafted and clearly carried your tale to your readers.

Really good life Ink!
Aaron

Posted 13 Years Ago


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This is splendidly written. I like the magical feel. Lovely work..xx

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"Teach me, my love, the art of letting go."

yes! really..absolutely mindblowing! i love it!





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So cool...I enjoyed every bit of it. Very entertaining poetry. (:

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It really set me into a mind-set that I was truly feeling everything that you depicated. What has happened in my life, and what is going on {with a guy} really connected with this and it threw me into thoughts of what I'm really doing. And how hard I'll fall.

This is really emotinal, raw, and just amazing. I loved it. :D

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Makes me think of school

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ohmygod i love it just as much as i did the first. it was awesome! well written, deep, and powerful. awesome!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i love it!! Then again, I love all your poems!!!:)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

at first i had no idea what you were talking about or going with this (in the first stanza) but as you continued i liked it and the set up and words started to make more sence, and im sure plenty of poeple can relate, so nice job. I really liked it. C:

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Kim
Wow this is simply amazing! I really loved all the emotional impact on this write. So well written and expressed!

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Wow...what a contrast...totally shows the wide depth of your writing

"For hundred days, it had only been her,
The one who made your everything blur.
Tell me, oh tell me, can you still be mine?
I know I’m no her, but lie to me that it’s fine."

What a stanza initself...says so much :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


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