Stuck

About a previous personal experience. was sleeping one night and just decided to write it in case anyone was in the same dilemma as me one day. i never wrote any peice of poetry before.

The memories of having fun together will never perish.
The look of your eyes I always will cherish.
I cant stand to say this its like I have been shot.
That every thing we had and everything we got.
Is now being stopped, on this spot because you have me in a heart head-lock.
I cant escape your embrace.
 thought I can tell you what I have faced.

Its not your fault that we cant talk to each other.
Its just I cant stand to see you with another.
Its not because of jealousy or any selfish emotion.
Please believe me, this is only 1 portion.
You think I am the same as the others not avoiding you but I am not.
What we had was beyond strong but listen to my song
and realize that it has been hurting Me much to long.

I think about what I have wrote and wonder if I have another chance.
So i avoid telling you my lyrical dance.
So everything goes well in my head for the time being.
But then I think about you and him, my eyes start gleaming.
So I repeat my ever going cycle.
 not sure if you’ll ever be my prized title.

The thought of being with you is my only temptation.
But then again it is my blindness to realization.
That the only way it will end is to tell you this poem.
And know that our friendship is broken.
I will regret this in what I have to say.
But because of it I will sleep one day.

 

Author's Note

Never wrote anything like this before. want to know if it sounds like in the correct order? criticism welcome...just really want to know what other people think.

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

If these are your thoughts in real life... I have unfortunately been in that place.. it's aweful.. I have lost an uplifting friendship with someone I still care for... stupid but true.. only time will heal. My circumstances were alot more complicated and I could not share the truth with him due to that.. I am not the lying type. He won't speak to me now.. I don't blame him.. I couldn't either at one time but more because of my emotions, I was afraid of saying things that could cause problems for others. Well life isn't fair.. you find someone great and bam something gets in the way. I hope you can bring yourself to at least speak to this person.. how can it stop unless you confront it at some point? Running isn't the solution. I hope you are lucky enough to get this person as your prized title one day!!! thank you for sharing!!!! You should continue writing as you can see you stirred me.. it's quite good work!

[Butterflymom]

This is a very heartfelt, and emotional piece. Keep writing!