Our Moment

Just a nostalgic piece about a certain someone. My first piece on Writers Cafe! :-)

Our Moment

Why is it that I can't have, I can't have you

The one I starve for,

I long and ache for your eyes

your touch

that sears through all the lies

my forbidden fruit that I crave

the guilty pleasure I can't waive

your lovely lips that caress

your eternal face that i need to possess

flesh on yielding flesh

deep and intertwining mesh

that moment,

will last until there's no more light

because i cannot let you,

i will not let you leave

my soul found its match

what we had

what could have been

don't forget what we meant

even only in that moment

Author's Note

My first shared poem.

Reviews

[Atram Dace]

congratulation for your first submission here. Well, this poem possess a strong admiration to someone through the use of the images such as forbidden fruit, and yielding flesh which by far works well to picture that level of passion you had to someone. However, since the poem started with some sort of loss, try to add images that convey that sense of loss. Since you already have image for the passion, adding pictures of loss and pain of not being together will strenghten the overall piece.

[Pat Kipkemoi]

Thank you very much! I''ll definitely add that.