Broken Heart

The way I feel sometimes about being a Christian.

Fighting my broken heart makes the world seem so horrible

when I try to grasp the light each day I only catch the rubble

of the lives crashing down around me as His masterpiece seems to fade

I want so much to be free, but my own self has forbade

it and I yearn to follow rightly what I know is true and good, 

but the attractions of this world only pull me farther from where I should

be as I grief and cry and sorrow in my lonely prayers each day 

all I can set my hope on is the sacrifice that my Lord God gave away. 

Author's Note

Although the worst rhythm I have ever written for a poem, it expresses how I feel about life as a young Christian man.

Reviews

[Gem]

Yes, the rhythm seems a little jilty. But the message/emotions (pull of the world) is something many people can relate to. It's like from Romans where Paul says "that which I should do I don't and what I shouldn't do I do" and the hymn "prone to wander, Lord I feel it." The message is timeless, spanning the generations.

[Yellow Butterfly]

Such a heartfelt write which I am sure many can relate to. Don't ever doubt what is sincere to your heart... your beliefs will mend your broken heart..

Stay blessed..

YB

[Filipa Sofia Sampaio]

This is beautiful. I actually think that the fact it was your worst rhythm didn't affect the beauty of this poem. It is beautiful the way it is :) Our heart doesn't care about the rhymes, and what matters here is that you expressed your feelings.

[Blissful Sin]

Great poem and wonderful write!

-Bliss

[Quill~]

It's a struggle I know all too well. You write with heart, and I felt this piece deeply. Profound words penned..Nicely done.

[Tim Piotrowicz]

Thank you Quill!

[Quill~]

:) you're welcome.

[Daniel Eckert]

Aw the struggle between faith and temptation. The hardest path is the high path and you portray just that through this poem. Very well written!

[Tim Piotrowicz]

thank you sir!

[Carlton Carr]

Don't worry about τђє rhymes it is your heart that counts - and yours shines through your words and your belief. I have read your profile and understand what it is like to struggle with difficulties. I admire your desire to tell your story through your writing and can see that this is not an ego trip for you but a real desire to help others. You are an obviously wonderful youg man and I wish you τђє best for a great future.
God bless.

[Tim Piotrowicz]

Thank you for this encouragement. Today was a day I needed it!

[Sami Khalil]

A good read and write...:)

[Hidden]

a good poem doesn't need a perfect rhyme to be a masterpiece. This is a very beautifully written poem!

[Tim Piotrowicz]

Thank you! Thank you!

[Megan]

I feel you. Struggles come and happen and our hearts are broken by people of this world or situations. And it's hard to keep the faith. But the faith is free. Frees us from all our heartaches, even the ones continuing. I like this because I can relate to it a lot. And I really like the structure of it :)

The beautiful thing is,
our God won't relent
:)

[Tim Piotrowicz]

Thank you for this kind review. The encouragement helps me want to write more!