Emperor Chang's kingdom, Western China, 1486

Emperor chang's kingdom, Western China 1486

 

Fire,water,eath,air the elements of power and of life and of death. They work together as one, or they once did. Till Shan Kung got power hungery and destroyed everything and everyone in his way keeping only those who had proven their worthyness and proven their trust and their lives.

 

Kung is a powerful man, with strong armys made of steel and bronze. Kung and his armys had raided and defeated their foes, and left their souless bodys there for the familys of the dead to see rot, to see how strong and powerfull Kung is, to seel that he is, like the dead warrors, souless and cares of no one but him.

 

Shan Kung was born with no power of the element and as he grew older he had grown angry and at the age twenty-eight he spent his days studying the elements, for he wanted to destroy all of it, cause if he can not have the power no one can.

 

So he created his army and taken down every elemented, well almost every elemented. He did'nt get the emperor's youngest daughter, Lei Chang. The emperor's wife, the empress, had layed the little princess into a basket, "Don't cry you little empress, you will soon be safe." The empress had said to Lei, and she listened to the war outside "You will one day come back to us, mayve in thousands of years, but some day you will come and serve as empress of all of china, some day you will be a hero and save the people of China." with her words she set a flower in Lei's tiny hands, tears both filled in the empress'es and her daughters eyes.

 

"Hey there." it was one of Kung's warrors, the empress quickly said to Lei "Return and save us all. May the gods bless you." and with that she pushed the basket into the river. There was now a few warrors and Kung himself running towards her, the only thing she could do was run. She did'nt get far. Shan Kung grabbed the back of the empress's robes pulling her to the ground. "Let go of me." she screamed at him, he just grinned. "I don't think so, your ever so highness." his eyes shone with sussece "Now tell me empress where is your daughter, what is her name again. Lei is it not?"

 

The empress did not speak, Kung just waited, and soon said "I will find her, and put her in the ground with her sisters and her father." he snared at her "But you, you I will keep. Brave,strong,beautiful women like yourself will make a lovely wife." He smiled and hit the empress in the head with the hilt of her sword.

Reviews

[Wingless Fallen Angel]

Good job. A few grammar mistakes, like not spacing after the comma and an apostrophe in the wrong place. Also, the yellow color of the words kind of takes away from the overall story.

[Pharaohs Queen]

thx

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:) can't wait

[Piper Mclean]

I loved it Cleo