The Question

The big dilemma of life

standing at the top..
everything feels so small..
everything looks so down..
but am i standing tall?

for everything i did..
and for my every sin..
for her soul that i hurt..
would even hell let me in?

one step away from my destiny..
just one leap of faith..
just one step to leave it all..
but would there be peace in death?

i stand here looking down and i see..
the one i hurt with every lie i told..
can this cure the pain i caused her..
has my soul already been sold?

my life was her biggest loss..
my love was her biggest pain..
but when i am finally gone..
would my death be her gain?

can i reduce her hurt..
can i roll back my sin..
can i take away her pain..
and can i make her win?

Should i take a step forward..
should i jump to my death..
should i take one step back..
and try to restore her faith?

Author's Note

Feel free to suggest changes in words or rhymes...

Reviews

[Madhoora]

I think the purpose of the poem is perfectly achieved. You probably should rearrange the first line of the second last stanza. In my opinion, It makes perfect sense but the word "hurt" strikes the ear a bit as far as rhythm is concerned. Other than that I think the whole point of the poem is crystal clear bringing out every single emotion very well