Conspiracy

mad drunk guy preaching about life and the downfall of humanity

Don't see 

their end, demise

perhaps it's that whole

thing with clinging

their routes they could never

pick, devise

Not easy 

coming to terms with facts

let alone the fact that all that

filled their head were lies

Didn't understand in this instance,

their final outcome they just couldn't 

revise

Priorities

fucked up

the important s**t 

minimized

One couldn't after all, walk 

through entire life, with a fake

disguise

Claim knowledge,worth,to be wise

reality would slice through

sooner or later

like sharp knives

Never even once

did it cross their mind

To ask the question

Who're these people?

Having them sanitized?

But that very sentence gave him away

some sort of cult leader wanna-be,

they'll say

To the sort they had him, his sort, desensitized

For want of morality -

did everyone just take their advice?

Had they not heard - 

of mental whoredom

Seems that on the schedule

wasn't really a problem

When went their life,

from being 'awesome'

to fail,

leaves fallin in autumn,

when they withered, then 

would realization strike?

The things 

they were deprived of, told were little

not worth much, unimportant,

were in fact of utmost importance

Wonder now why it seemed at that moment

not in accordance

Didn't know there was a jail,

let alone these cages

and a warden

another rotten fruit 

on glutton

too long he'd had the mutton

Seemed people like him

had this king who along with them

had this kink, to have every of their kind

extinct, that was always along their theories

stringed, not to point fingers

Till its in people's face

and they really do have to wonder

something here does really stink

did the world pass by while they merely

blinked

That innocence then is/has to be

crucified, yet a part wonders can 

one really let go of this childish part?

Horrifying is death,

proven with everyday real homicide

one's theories of/after death are daily questioned

and falsifed, defended

Dawns the epiphany that reality

has been beautified

There is no sunny side

by delusion people are taken

electrified, recite anthems,

people of ill logic and ill reason

by whom the race is multiplied

Author's Note

draftin

Reviews

[alanwgraham]

Hi P, This reads like a stream of consciousness with lots of interesting thoughts about the state of the world bubbling up. Some good rhymes and word play. My personal feeling is that you should stick with the flow but tidy up bits that don't work.
Well worth a look!
Take care.
Alan

[pinhead07]

Thank you for the kind words! I wrote this quite a while ago and what I've learned and what people have told me is exactly what you said, tidy up the bits that don't work, stick with the flow! Thanks :)

[Sami Khalil]

So much truth embedded here and there in questioning form and realizations. You are like a thinker seeking answers to life's beginnings and demises. Kudos.

[pinhead07]

Thank you so much for the kind words, sir! They mean the world to me! :D

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome sir.

[Sami Khalil]

"reality would slice through
sooner or later
like sharp knives
Never even once
did it cross their mind"

[Sami Khalil]

"Didn't know there was a jail,
let alone these cages
and a warden"

[Matching Socks]

I am so sorry, I forgot to give you a rating!!
I think I was over come with excitement!!
Anyway, top score.

[Matching Socks]

This was just all 'round awesome, I agree with the Lady below. This could totally be a rap or hip hop song.
Great job, some real hard hitting lines.

[Tricia Pattinson]

I know you're still working on this but I have to say your words are powerful. This could be a rap piece! You've captured the tendency to see what we want to see and the vulnerability to people who tell us what we want to hear. Keep on working on!

[pinhead07]

Thank you so much :)