Ill

The days are monotonous.

Maybe that is something ominous.

I try to be an optimist.

Panic attack.

Stops me in my tracks.

Voices harass.

I zone out, my brain is not intact.

I start mumbling, that's how I react.

I start pacing like a maniac.

Ill; I take my pills.

In front of the television I try to lie still.

An eight year old girl killed.

The world's going downhill.

Women killed for honor.

People killed by a damn bomber.

I feel calmer.

This world; demons'll conquer.

Acid thrown on a young girl.

I try to be placid.

A young girl's eyes gouged out.

Humans did all this?!? I doubt it.

Every channel's full of tales of horror.

People; among them, live monsters.

Reviews

[MantaStyle]

Nice poem about a person going insane about the world's craziness. I also like how the poem is told. Other than that it feels a bit lacking. There is no message or moral when I definitely feel that you could fit one in it with such a topic as the negativity of the world instead of just pointing out how evil the world is. I came here to read about it and it was a decent read but there was nothing I could take with me after leaving the poem as it just echoes something many of us already know.

[pinhead07]

Thank you for the review!
I’ll definitely try packing more into a poem the next time! :)))

[MantaStyle]

Good luck! Before you make a poem, try to think of yourself as a reader of the poem and what they would think when they read it.

A good example would be my poem.....jk

Hahaha, But I would really appreciate if you can tell me your thoughts on my poem as well.

[pinhead07]

Good advice! Hahahaha, will do! :)))

[Just Kim]

Wow, I can feel part of this write, so well written... so emotional as well

[pinhead07]

Thank you! I'm glad you like it! :)))