the body

i wrote this some years ago... its one of my favs.... i guess its a spiritual question.

 

 

 

THE BODY

The body a mesh

Of hair, nails and flesh

Muscles and strong bone

Its just the body

The mind stands alone

 

Full of life and blood red

But what happens when your dead

The muscles and flesh rot away

Bones become brittle and decay

 

What about the memories

What about the morals

What about what’s in your mind

Don’t they travel with the soul

They don’t get left behind

9-25-01

Reviews

[intangible_soul]

Ahah! I have pondered this question myself. I think the answer of "what happens when we die" can only be answered by the individual themselves. We have different thoughts, beliefs, philosophies. For me, we aren't created, nor do we ever disappear. We just change forms. Very nice write!

[Sarah]

I think this is something that everyone has wondered about (atleast I have) & it can be kind of scary. >.

[larryb]

I like this one very well put together..flows nicely

[justjenn_2u]

So sad that the body has not control over what decisions our minds make. I do think the thoughts in the mind travel with you soul. The soul is made up of our thoughts, actions and emotions. Enjoyed this one.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

liked this philosophical pondering :) nicely done,. the length is good, you dont go on too long a diatribe. i think you did a great job with this!

[S. P. Vaporis]

this is the purpose of poetry, the ponderance of life's deepest questions. thanks for sharing this! ~peace~

[Brenda Sue]

Very deep really. Something to think about. Wonderfully penned. Great job.

[~crazy Beautiful~]

the almighty question of what comes next
wonderfully put
loved this line
The mind stands alone
it should be the title
nice work
thank you for entering my contest

[Bellarina]

This is really good. A description of the body fading away. Very beautiful. :)

[Wolfwind Words]

I agree, it's a question that one can only answer for them selves when their life in the living body ends.
I would like to think that our life on earth is just training for being re-born into a high state of being.
Great poem! I could find no mis-spells or grammer issues in this peice
Keep up the good work!

[Blackbirdsong]

I really like the questions in you ask in this piece and the way you ask them as well. These are probably things all of us wonder at times and so there is a truth in wanting to know the answers.

I only saw one typo "your" when you should have used "you're" but that's it..so no biggie...trust me, you're not the only one who has a problem with self editing. I do too. :)