Without trace

narrative verse

 

 

 Without trace. 08

 

The soulless city lies in wait

 to capture young ambitious fools

Who think that they can demonstrate

 they have no need to obey rules.

 

They are convinced that they can win.

Become a star against the odds.

 But very soon they are drawn in

begin to follow darker gods.

 

At first its drink and then its drugs.

Immediately they start to lose

 naïve and innocent : Just mugs

open to all kinds of abuse.

 

Their cherished dreams do not come true,

 they have to face reality

 and set their sights on something new.

A lesson in humility.

 

The wiser ones soon realise

that stardom comes to very few.

 A fact that they must recognise

and this reluctantly they do.

 

The foolish ones still persevere

 in pursuit of their hopeless quest

Until at last they disappear.

 Swallowed up like all the rest.

 

The soulless city lies in wait

 for fools who ignore all advice.

Assuming those who challenge fate.

 are prepared to pay the price.

 

21-Feb-08

Reviews

[Monners]

I like this alot. Wise and true. Very nice rhyme scheme as well.

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You have laid all your words with ease, flowing perfectly and so eloquent. "The soulless city lies in wait
for fools who ignore all advice.
Assuming those who challenge fate.
are prepared to pay the price."
This is very good Ivor, " a lesson in humility" well put. Great structure. Best wishes.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

The lure of fame and fortune is prevalently commercialised and bombarded upon the innocence of our youth, in blatant and merciless fashion. The media, big corporations and greedy exploiters never once concerning themselves over collateral damaged souls left in the wake of reality's disappointment!

Excellent point, poetically executed in verse!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee