In two minds

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In two minds

 

John William Henry Barthrop wrote.

In iambic pentameter

an amusing suicide note

Stuck it on the water heater.

Which he turned on but left unlit.

Although his intent was to die.

He put no thought in planning it.

It was in fact a hopeless try.

The fool forgot to feed the meter

and very soon the gas ran out.

Fate decides, you cannot cheat her.

So he survives only to doubt

 if in fact he really meant it.

He’s still alive though discontented.

 

05/11/2009

 

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Reviews

[linley{luu}]

A very nice write. Rather amusing, I like it. I like the line 'Fate decides, you cannot cheat her'
Thank you for your reveiw. =)
Linley

[Marie Anzalone]

Luke directed me here. Like he and Lynne, I also looked this up!

I find it fascinating to delve into the minds and lives of people who, for whatever reason, really are not living. The unintentionally alive, the fearful, the hopelessly depressed.

It is interesting here to contemplate the thought process that went into carefully crafting the suicide note, but putting no thought at all into the carrying out of the process. Did he fail? I think that is the ambiguous question at the end. How do we classify a failed suicide? How does one classify a person who is alive but really is not sure he wants to be?

Very thought-provoking. Thank you for this.

[An owl on the moon]

How the hand of destiny weaves the world around us... in ways sometimes we may never see. This was a very insightful, intriguing write.

[deeps]

I like this, i found quite cute really!
It sure is an intersting write I shall say!

[Erotic Jem]

Love this :D Favourite line.. the fool forgot to feed the meter. Amusing and interesting.

[cest la vie]

I love this piece. Like Luke, I had to look this up as well. Great morning read. A bit of an adventure.

Nicely done!

[Cool Handless Luke]

I absolutely love this! Great write. It drew me in enough to google this JWHB in hopes of reading his amusing iambic pentameter suicide note!