Portrait

My despondency is painted on my soul

Each stroke thickening acrylic dysphoria

Until the portrait is muddy and cracked

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

boom boom boom short sweet and true damn I like this... I will have to read more of you:) this has a very Zen quality to it I like it yes yes not poison coming from you at all

[poison&kerosene]

Thank you for your very colorful review :)

[KurKota]

Simply stated, but stirs much thought and emotion. Well done! The skill of masterful writing.

[poison&kerosene]

Oh wow that is quite the compliment! Thank you!

[Ralph Proenza (Docralph..]

I love your metaphors. For me, your words paint a clear portrayal of your soul with all the nuances of a palette. Excellent writing.
-R

[poison&kerosene]

Thank you kindly for reading my writing and your kind words :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

poets tend to paint what ends up cracking...never perfect portrait with smiles....it is harder to write happy, i believe.
really like "thickening acrylic dysphoria"--
j.

[poison&kerosene]

It definitely is. Art seems to be birthed by pain. Thank you!

[Ted Kniffen]

It’s a rare portrait…thin layers of muted acrylic painted on wood…each brush stroke building to a point, and then the façade begins to crack…or is it the wood beneath?

Writers have the unique ability to draw emotions from words…and by doing so provide a path for others to follow.

Not all paths lead through sunny meadows…many lead us through dark places of the soul. By letting those emotions bubble to the surface we can achieve some semblance of rationality and perhaps lend ourselves to
others who feel the same but cannot express those feelings.

Your portrait pk brings many thoughts to the surface, well done.
A good write.

[poison&kerosene]

Again I must say that these reviews are often times better than my poem. You all add to the story wonderfully. Thank you for reading and understanding the essence of this very short poem!

[R.E. Ray]

This is the portrait of despair, like one of Van Gogh’s last paintings. I know the “portrait” because I’ve lived and written much about it. You captured exceptionally well an image we can see; the dark face of hopelessness, the heaviness of life on our face and shoulders. The cracks define us (if they don’t break us), and we become classic art (survivors) for others to admire. Good writing!

[poison&kerosene]

I think your review may have been better than my actual poem! haha. I am happy you understood exactly the emotions I was trying to convey. It makes the world feel less lonely. Thank you for your kind words!

[R.E. Ray]

You’re welcome. You write exceptionally well. Keep writing. Sharing your words makes us a stronger community.

[poison&kerosene]

Thank you! My brain refuses to be quiet so I may as well let it speak. I am happy to be a part of this community. :)