Goodbye

sometimes when I wake up

I forget your gone

when I go to your house

it feels all wrong

 

I remember how I stood by your side

trying to say goodbye

I held your hand

and no matter how

hard I tried

I still cried

because it was so hard

to say

goodbye

 

when we threw

your ashes into the lake

I started to ache

there was a hole in my heart

it was tearing me apart

 

I knew you wouldn't last

but I didn't think it

would happen that fast

but I was wrong

now your gone

 

when life gets me down,

thats when I really realize

your not around I know i'll see you again

but till then

goodbye...

Reviews

[Kelly M.]

Aw, tear jerking chapter. Really powerful and emotional write. It went harmoniously together and I'm sure it would be very painful to give a last good-bye especially to one you truly love. Great write, Julie! :)

[TheFemininePad]

What an incredibly sad song. It brought out a couple of tears from me. This is very powerfully written. I can feel your emotions behind it. This must have been very painful to write. Though our best writings are done from our raw emotions. Great job here Julie!

[Jesse Jacques]

this poem almost made me cry. very descriptive and sad.

[Shardbearer99]

That was a lovely, sad poem. I haven't yet experienced what it is like to say goodbye to somebody you love. It must be very painful. But it was a lovely poem with a great impact. Great writing

[Raymond]

Saying goodbye is so hard to do. This poem is very touching, with a nice rhyming touch to keep the readers reading. I love it!

[GamingGal]

Pros: Rhyming that helps it flow, very nice. It touches on a sad, upsetting topic, but it is something we all must face. But at the end there is a small spark of hope with the line "I know I'll see you again."

Cons: None really.

Overall: A good poem that gives insight on a sad topic without making it depressing.

[Markymark]

A dreadful subject somehow gilded with promises. Drives home our mortality, and then leaves us with faith to believe in something other than finality.

Good write..

Mark

[KAREN]

Heart felt, sad, full of love! EXCELLENT write!!