A Poem by Prateeksha Khot

This is a Than-Bauk. The Than-Bauk is Burmese and has Three lines, four syllables each. And the fourth, third and second syllables respectively all rhyme.


It's a bright day
as I lay here
with gay memories

                               Watching the trees
                               as the breeze play
                               with teasing arms.

                      Flowers at brink
                      of rosed pink; dipped
                      in ink of hues.

                                In azured skies
                                Butterflies flit
                                With ties of love.

Knowing that life
though with strife, is
still rife with BEAUTY.

© 2010 Prateeksha Khot

Author's Note

Prateeksha Khot
My first Than-Bauk so please bear with me. An kindly suggest improvements.

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Interesting write...I was unaware of this verse form...A good attempt...The picture accompanying the poem is also very nice...Perhaps the use of all that colour in the lines was unwarranted...Also, I feel the grammar is off in a couple of places. You've made use of good imagery, but I feel it can be done better...There have been so many poems written on nature over centuries, so in order to establish your uniqueness, I feel you must add that special ingredient of your own, which I found missing here.
Nevertheless, its a good can only get better with time...Keep writing... :)

Posted 13 Years Ago

2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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this is beauty. keep writing.
Much love!

Posted 4 Years Ago

nice thinking and deep in life point of view

Posted 6 Years Ago

Nyc lines... ....................

Posted 7 Years Ago

Great job, although the colors wasn't needed but other then that it was great.

Posted 8 Years Ago

Nicely written! I like these lines.
Knowing that life
though with strife, is
still rife with BEAUTY.
Tells you that life has the element of beauty in it!

Posted 8 Years Ago

nicely written... alluring expressions

Posted 9 Years Ago

nice and lovely.. expressions used are very nice!!

Posted 10 Years Ago

dear happy-go-lucky rebel,

You are really good.

"Watching the trees
as the breeze play
with teasing arms." _ Beautiful expressions.

Posted 11 Years Ago

I really like thi,s it's so simple and yet so elegant!

Posted 11 Years Ago

liked it......

Posted 13 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Added on May 31, 2010
Last Updated on May 31, 2010


Prateeksha Khot
Prateeksha Khot

Mumbai, Maharashtra, India

A happy-go-lucky rebel, i like doing things my way : that is the different way. I am creative and like trying out new stuff : There's hardly anything in which I am not interested. Plus point ? : I HAV.. more..