Reminiscing mother

                           Reminiscing mother

 O' mother it's been more than three decades

since you were no more with us

you were the lamp that we got lost

still, we try to be resplendent in the glow you left behind.

I grew old and forlorn the day you'd gone

an event I reminisce -- I deviated 

while circumambulating in a faraway temple

your query to passersby was -"anyone seen a child passing this way?"

none could reply for in their eyes I was a grown up lady!

I'd seen vendors at daybreak selling their wares

first and foremost to you, hoping to profit more

and your compassion towards downtrodden

Lo presto! one should see to believe.

Divine taste of food cooked by you

many secretly covet to get a taste

you lived your life with the shield of tenets

you yourself had created.

I could never live up to your expectation 

or is it that I got subsumed by your brilliance?

like the lighted candle in broad sunlight

Painfully I now reckon, I caused you distress and unhappiness

Still the values you instilled in me 

are so strong that in many births hereafter

If I may take so, I shall never compromise

On virtues you bestowed on me, come what may!

O' mother a little princess has born to me after your departure

I now pass the legacy of your qualities to her

May you feel happy and contentment for me

and bless us from your heavenly abode.

    

                       

Author's Note

this is a tribute to my mother. I would be happy if others care to read

Reviews

[Lisasview]

I love poems about mothers dear Prima..
I know you asked me to read your work and review..
I am happy to do so... You have several very good words and lines...but I see no structure to you poem..
It feels more like a short story...
The idea of your mother being gone... of you really not appreciating her wisdom while she was alive and now having a child that you would hope to inspire is what I basically feel the poem is about... Oh yes, and coming back and being a better person..
I think if you go over it and leave some words out it would be more structured and better to read. Perhaps a rhyme would be good..
I am no expert..so i am so sorry if I have offended you..
Lisa, now in Spain

[prema]

Thankyou for the review. I do agree with you. It is more like prose than poetry. But then I call many of my poems not as poems but mental outpourings. Many lack ambiguity which is the beauty of poem. Also I am unable to write in meters.i am not at all offended.

[Lisasview]

You are most welcome.
You might like my poem.. Miles Apart or Cry
Lisa, now in Spain