Welcome to Devianta

Just a little introduction to what I make

I’m never lost in thought; I just wander in my own little world. No one believes me though. I wish I could show people the world I made, the people i crafted. Heh, it’s a good thing I’m not God in this world… Things would be much more morbid if that was the case. My little world, Devianta, as i call it, is fantastic, but stained. There’s the bloodshed, the curses, and the lack of defined physics. But all will come in due time, after all, i haven’t created this wonderland alone. I have my Partners in crime, such as Twi. I take the lead most of the time, however.
let me introduce you to the most interactive part of Devianta at this time- Mt. Ebott. Sound familiar? like i said, i’d not make a good God. I pull from other worlds to add to my own. you know the story there, if not, play Undertale.
Oh, there’s another thing happenning. a Carnival’s come to Canada, so that can be looked forward to.
So yeah, no that I’ve introduced you to the land, i hope you’ll drop by and look around! There’s always fantastical things happenning, so Devianta’s a great escape.
See you around!
Pri~

Reviews

[JayG's biggest fan]

why do you capitalize partners and not yourself?
I like the line: "I had not make a good god". it was very clear, and really got your point across.

I'm sorry I don't know the story from there, and what would a video game add to my understanding?

I don't think fantastical is a word.

[Pri]

frankly, i'm not sure i wrote this like two years ago.
thank you for this though.
and the playing a video game would be the fact you know what this "MT. Ebott" would be.

[JayG's biggest fan]

I still don't think fantastical is a word.

[Luther Calvin]

Interesting introduction. I can tell you live in a world of pure imagination. Was that an intentional Tolkein reference at the beginning, with wandering without being lost? Great first lines. The text would be great as a monologue, which isn't always the case for first person tales. Its colloquial style leads to a different take on it, which works for this, but might not for longer works. There were also a large number of capitalization and punctuation errors, which really broke the immersion. It also explained very little, for an introduction. All in all, it was interesting. Keep at it.

[Jason A. Skilton]

This tidbit makes absolutely no sense.
I cannot even tell the genre of this paragraph.

In fact, I can't even tell if you're trying to write fiction or nonfiction. "play undertale".

[Pri]

Well, this is both old and made to be like an invitation. i can assure you this is fiction, but it's not fully original. this is an invite to the world of my mind, one of magic and fantasy, of modern conviences and medieval problems, of monsters and humans. This is a world inspired by other creations, as well as made with things of my own creation. thank you for your imput, and i get that my mind doesn't walways compute when i don't spend 3 sentences on my every thought. i'm working on this, and am proud to say i have improved since i wrote this.

[Jason A. Skilton]

I'm not usually a grammar nazi, but "input" is spelled with an N. That was pretty annoying. "imput".