'Be Mine..'

Evacuating differences and lightning up a new light..

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"My nights and blues..

'Can we use some glues'..

Translating few stories..

May light up new glories..

Lovely verdicts lasts long..

Mustard uttering candy song..

Rubbing an Ayurved herb..

Time to patch the rough turf..

Issue needs to be dumped..

Happiness needs to be pumped..

Gush in, My Sweet Pineapple..

Time to locate unheard chapel..

Being secluded on cosy night does pay..

Imagine sun without the lovely ray..

Get in now the shades and be mine..

Who knows how long will moon shine..!!"

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Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Good visions create by your words. Many strong statements in the poem I likes.
"Rubbing an Ayurved herb..
Time to patch the rough turf.."
A amazing poem. I love powerful words. This outstanding poem I had to read a few times.
Coyote

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Thank you Ms. Sarah..!!

[sarah]

this is a fantastic poem!! wow so amazing

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Thank you stars are far..!!

[stars are far]

WOW
nice..nice words :)

[MissWordSmith]

'''Can we use some glues'' again, WHAT are you trying so say?

not one line makes any sense.

mustard uttering candy song???
it's AYURVEDIC not ayurved.

what ISSUE needs to be dumped??
time to locate unheard chapel?? unheard?


the last stanza is quite good. definitely an improvement.

I like the line ''Imagine sun without the lovely ray..''

there are grammar mistakes here and there, but nothing really major.

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Thank you Kaiodem..!!!

[Kaiodem]

This what my mind thought of when I read this...Dazzling.

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Thank you Cherrie Palmer Madam..!!

[Cherrie Palmer]

just wonderful

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Thank you Akshat..!!