LIFE

well i guess evry other human has a different view about love...here i`m putting up my thot bout love...well itzz a short poem....

 

 

 

 

life is just a game....

where there is noone to blame...

yes i am all alone rest every thing is same.....

 

you just tell me one thing.....

will you be ever with me......??

i think of you the entire day.....

do you to think of me......????

 

my past is cutting up my life....

my bruces are hawling at me.....

i`am screaming out with my pain...

this fear is dumping down in me....

 

i apologize, for the last night what i did i know i was wrong.....

i will sacrifice for you my whole life, just forgive me baby comeon.....

 

life is just a game....

where there is noone to blame....

yes iam all alone rest everything is same.......

Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Its beautiful and raw at the same time. Beautiful, because the emotions have been delivered here. Raw, because your work lacked structure.
One advice, always take care of the grammar. Start a new sentence with a capital letter and avoid the usage of "..." so much. Rest, everything was nice :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the movement and the purpose of the poem. I believe life is a game in some arena and in situation with the people we really care about. We need to be kind and loving. Easy to take blame for things. Wise to be wise and forgive. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[amdc101]

I agree with Bhavya Kaushik's review. The only line I didn't understand was the last one. Keep Writing.

[prodicallife]

thnnxxzzzz bhavya....for your review...will definietly improvise over it....:):)