Closed Book

What lies behind us and what lies ahead of us are tiny matters compared to what lives within us. - Thoreau

Sequestered.

With heart's lock and key.

Known to you and mystery to me.

Tell your secrets.

Show your lies.

That which brings a morning dew betwixt your inner thighs.

Then I will know your fastidious truth ...

Author's Note

"It takes two to speak the truth: one to speak, and another to hear." - Thoreau

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I'm sorry to suggest a specific change to your artistically honed poem, but the word "inner" is not necessary (we all know where that dew is) & the extra syllables interrupt the flow of such an impassioned sentiment, seemingly the climax of your poem, I would venture to say *wink! wink!* And now here's the secret -- she doesn't know & her dewy truth doesn't know either! That's becuz the essence of a woman is migratory (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Pete]

i know exactly what you mean - i wrestled with "inner" because it interrupted the flow but thought it was important in keeping with the theme - innermost things we hide about ourselves (feelings, lies, secrets, private things, diary etc.) i'll have to ponder it. i couldn't agree more with your observation of the essence of a woman - a riddle, wrapped in a mystery, inside an enigma. thanks as always for sharing for sharing thoughts my friend ... :)

[barleygirl]

I agree, it's a hard choice becuz i like your "innermost" theme . . .

[emmajoy]

' Known to you and mystery to me.'

'Your writing might be brief but it's rich with meaning, full of truth in all its guises. Surely there needs be a place where thoughts and memories should lie Lie waiting to be relived, treasured by the writer., perhaps a little added as distance clarifies,questions, denies or glories. Seems you understand that, your chosen words really speak with heart and passion. But, but.. I wonder, is it a Closed Book when one chooses to relive it, write it, lock it safe?

[Pete]

what you say quite true. i wanted to capture the idea that we all have hidden, secretive, private things that we keep to ourselves and fiercely guard. but then in intimacy we are tugged at to unveil. do we really ever reveal all or do we still keep some things to ourselves? yes, the book could be open as well as closed. i wrestled with it decided that most of us still hide things even in intimacy - never fully opening up. thanks ever so much em ... :)

[andrew mitchell]

Riveting stuff and so well written with that wisdom to match.

[Pete]

thanks andrew. remember to keep your friends close and your enemies even closer ... :)

[Patricia Wedel]

The early morning dew on rose petals...
perhaps that is why we press rose petals in our Diary
locked within our heart of hearts... the Secrets that
deny the Truth. truly, Pat

[Pete]

what you say so true. what some hide and deny to the world can be revealed in a diary. innermost truth of our hearts. thanks pat ... :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

I had to smile when I read the line about the dew...it seriously caught me by surprise, but it most assuredly compliments your closing line. That word "betwixt" is most fascinating. I'll have to practice that one aloud!

[Pete]

you're not the only one who was surprised by that line - i even surprised myself when i put it in but then realized that there is nothing more intimate than that so kept with the overall theme though a bit unexpected. the archaic word 'betwixt' is kind of cool huh - sort of rolls off the tongue and evokes a deep, classy feel. thank you for sharing thoughts kelly ... :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

Looks like another great season for the PATS!

[Pete]

omg - they're smokin'. i don't know how belichick does it year after year - putting together such a top-notch team. their defense is phenomenal this year ... :)

[R.E. Ray]

Ah, intimacy and vulnerability reveal so much truth. Words, music and art that speak truth from the heart.

[Pete]

don't they though? the things we hide from others are our truth. thanks r.e. ... :)

[John the Baptist]

The first several lines suggestively lead us on, then the next to last one gives us an erotic slap. I may not look upon morning dew in the same way again.

[Pete]

i figure you can't get more private than that, right? thanks j the b ... :)