Jack and Jill: The Real Story

Jack and Jill: The Real Story

A Poem by LynLee

Jack and Jill: The Real Story

 

 

Jack and Jill went up the hill

to fetch a pail of water.

But Jill pushed Jack

and down he went,

with his water turning red.

 

Jill walked to his side,

checked his eyes,

took the pail

and left him to die.

© 2011 LynLee


Author's Note

LynLee
a darker side of Jack and Jill

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dark like Tim Burton dark, i like it

Posted 13 Years Ago


I like this alot, so keep up the good work. I look forward to seeing more.

--M :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Haha I like the turn on jack and Jill's story.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Oh, what a mean Jill! Nice twist on a familiar rhyme.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Nice! What a wonderful twist on Jack and Jill!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Haha good job! Why would Jill do such a thing?!?!? Oh! And uhh I think in this case it might be pail instead of pale. But I'm not sure. Ohhh dictionary!

Posted 13 Years Ago


this is funny great job

Posted 13 Years Ago



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