fun in the sun

Sunshine in the chalk box,

Kids playing hopscotch,

Bubbles drifting through the summer air,

Running through the rape fields,

 

Yellow staining their clothes.

Water fights and water bombs,

Drench the children head to toe,

Paddeling pools and trampolines,

Fun is what this is.

 

Yellow water runs down the pavement,

Bees fly back to their home,

The wind picks up,

The bubbles float further,

The degrees lowers to single.

 

The fun will start again tomorrow,

Inthe meantime,

Well have some sleeptime,

Lemon and lime,

Drinks - yum

 

Reviews

[sushi]

From the rise til dusk... Enjoyed the rhythmic flow of emotions and the image you have captured in your wordings. You have not only portrayed yourself and your fellow beings playing with you but also bought the spot light on the surroundings to bring the feel to real. The bees, wind and bubbles have been placed in a very apt manner.

Enjoyed your writings....

Thanks for sharing.

[terisa green]

:)

[typingaway]

(:(:
amazing

[Sophie Titch]

oil seed rape is a plant!!! they make butter from it, its a yellow flower and grows in big fields and it gives summer its scent

[Maggie]

Very very cute, however "rape fields" confused me...

[Tasha]

"Rape fields" is a little different, but other than that it reminds me of the fun I had summers ago, and the fun I'm going to have this summer. Good job, I really enjoyed it. :)

[Sophie Titch]

rape is a plant loopyloo! oil seed rape lmao

[LoopyLoo]

"Rape Fields" This is rather Strange Phrase. The rest of the Poem is good though. :-)