Lighter than a Breath

Letting go in a controlled way. Or not.

05-21-'11

Drowning and falling,

Chocking and flailing. 

Never had I ever breathed

Air as heavy as this.

The anger, resentment

hurt and the dread-

this feeling of debasement,

leaves me cold yet, instead:

The pull and the tug 

of that ultimate light of freedom

leaves in my heart a dancing jitterbug:

full of excitement and whispery wisdom.

It stops the time, 

leaves my breath hanging,

my heart thudding

due to the adrenaline rushing.

I spread my arms wide

to embrace that fate

of which I long to ride

the thirst I long to sate.

The wind is howling in my hears,

freezing my nose and stopping my tears,

yet they fall and fall and fall

my happiness cleanses me from all.

Reviews

[BLBrown]

Really enjoyed this poem. Good flow. You wrote:

I spread my arms wide
to embrace that fate
of which I long to ride
the thirst I long to sate.

You might change "sate," to "slake," just to change up the more predictable wording. Really good job.

[khalid]

i have really enjoyed reading this nice poem with alltheimages, the nice words picking and the wonderful flow..