Prisoner of a Victim

Prisoner of a Victim

A Poem by Rachel Faith Darrow
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Shaking off you your smile could stop wars You put evening stars to shame What is the truth What should I want more? to be ransid fuel to your hurt or to hear you breathe my name?

"

Prisoner of the Victim

May I be your murderer and your savior

i want to see you bleed

I bless your precious smile

the breath in my lungs as I sing

 

If you would have me love you

half as much as you hurt me

the prisoner of a victim

who just chose not to be

 

I'm still washing your name from my lips

oh, to feel it leap off my tongue!

and to see your eyes recieve it

but you didn't say mine once

 

It's only right I take the blame

So sorry for my agony

You're the destroyer of a prisoner

Who fears vivid reality

 

Shaking off you

your smile could stop wars

You put evening stars to shame

What is the truth

What should I want more?

to be ransid fuel to your hurt

or to hear you breathe my name.

 

if you would have me love you

half as much as you hurt me

the prisoner of a victim

who just chose not to be

 

your transgression

my confession

that you just chose not to see

But I'm dead that I'd still love you

just as much as you hurt me

to be so brave

to here you say

my name at long last

and to hold your body close in silence

just because I can

to sing sweet praises in your ear

to have my heart held and healed

 

If you would have me love you

half as much as you hurt me

the prisoner of a victim

who just chose not to be

 

 

to see you bleed by my brave fist

and show you all the wrong you did

to rip the soul out of you

to see your cheeks tear-stained and blue

 

to chase my revolting desire

to throw your heart to the fire

to see you burn for my happiness

to be strong against you

and merciless

 

but you know the real me

you will laugh, rest assured

by your praises that I sing

and from them you do confirm

the truth i know

you already see,

I would ever hurt you

as much as you loved me

 

 

© 2013 Rachel Faith Darrow


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I like both versions of this poem, but I think I like this one more. Its a bit more detailed and in depth. This is certainly a passionate write. The one thing I'd say to do is add a few more stanza breaks to make it easier to read for all the readers. Aside from that. Nice work and welcome to writer's cafe!

Chaos_Collector

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Faith Darrow

8 Years Ago

crud... I thought I did that
hahah thank you so much for reviewing!
Chaos_Collector

8 Years Ago

Lol you're almost there! And you're welcome. It was a pleasure! :D



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I like both versions of this poem, but I think I like this one more. Its a bit more detailed and in depth. This is certainly a passionate write. The one thing I'd say to do is add a few more stanza breaks to make it easier to read for all the readers. Aside from that. Nice work and welcome to writer's cafe!

Chaos_Collector

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Faith Darrow

8 Years Ago

crud... I thought I did that
hahah thank you so much for reviewing!
Chaos_Collector

8 Years Ago

Lol you're almost there! And you're welcome. It was a pleasure! :D
"I'm still washing your name from my lips"

That is brilliant...

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Faith Darrow

8 Years Ago

thank you so much!!!

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Added on February 20, 2013
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Tags: broken heart, hurt, love, save, want, need, hold, desire, pain, harm
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Rachel Faith Darrow
Rachel Faith Darrow

The Labyrinth just beyond the Goblin City, CA



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