rain

a broken heart can change thing

the pain of a broken heart
its coming down
killing me deep inside
raining all around

here comes the rain
making every one go inside
washing away the happy pictures

the feeling is washed away
the smile is coming back
the images of you are almost gone
the rain is almost done

one last tear
one last drop
now someone is fixing my broken heart

Reviews

[Vanessa Rico]

You are quite talented my dear! I am happy to have you in the group! I suggest that you add the other members as friends so they can read and review your work as you will do for them! Good job!

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Really dark yet soft! I love your use of color and your picture!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Deeply heartfelt and measured integrity, fearless delivery and nautical, well done, fearlessly wrote.

[Lena M. P.]

Good metaphors, flows fairly evenly, a few misspelled words -hear comes the rain should be Here, The felling is washed away - I think you meant feeling. Lack of punctuation is a distraction. The problems are easily fixed.

[Ivy Rose]

I like the poem and the imagery used. The only problem is when starting a new line you have to capitalize the beginning of each word. Other than that there is nothing wrong and it is a really good poem.