noone knew

noone knew

A Poem by raindroplove
"

a little boy make a bet and it dosnt end right

"

  noone knew

i die that day

noone knew

that bet i made

noone knew

the water was cold

noone knew

i couldnt swim

noone knew

it was my last day on earth

noone knew

theyd be puting rose on my grave

noone knew noone knew

 

© 2011 raindroplove


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Good flow. I like the imagery and the path.

Shame he died.

Matthew

Posted 13 Years Ago


Noone should be separated into no one- But this is a very good piece indeed. I like the emotion juxtaposed here.

Posted 13 Years Ago


really sad and scary two thumbs up

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

really sad but really good.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Really lovely, dark, and sad. You never know if it's going to be the last time you see a person so you have to be careful about the way you treat people!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on April 15, 2011
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in your pocket, AL



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