my colorful world

read it

the bus is yellow

the apple is red

how can i get you out of my head

 

your eyes are blue

your lips are pink

i love your wink

 

your hair is blonde

my hair is brown

you can make my frown turn upside down:)

 

i love you lol

 

Reviews

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

Simple and nicely done. It's like a short, loving ditty that plays over and over in the back of your head.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

sweet innocent and a lovely way to start reading the day, well done

[Just a Dream]

lol. i love it its sweet and funny

[MIngram]

This makes perfect sense. 2 gold stars. Keep refining your work to make it better. I agree with the addition of more powerful words. Even the arrangement can alter the mood. Play with the order a bit to make it more powerful.

[TheUnforgivinFallenAnge..]

Not bad. In my opinion try telling a life exp. story with this. It flows really great dont get me wrong. Short poetry like this is fun to read. But I think one way you could improve (in my opinion) is adding more intense words, make the readers spine tingle as they read it. Also add more length to it. But besides that great poem good job.