The Other Dame

The Other Dame

A Poem by Ramya

Happy was I
in your warm cocoon.
Giggling and smiling,
shining like
the silver moon.
Sang songs did we,
Dancing to
unheard tunes.
Hugging and kissing
in the silence of your room.
So sure was I
when I met
you, my dearie,
I thought you were
my one true love fairie.

Madly in love
with you, my darling,
I drew out our future
With six kids,
a house with striped awning.

Time ticked by
and bitter did you turn
To me, my love,
all that you burned.

No cocoon, no songs,
Dancing, that was gone.
No hugs and no kisses,
They did not belong.

Cried did I, my dear.
Saddened by grief,
I erased our kids,
Tore the awning
Your relief?

I drew out my heart,
To wash out the pain.
Heartless and thoughtless,
My madness, your gain?

Not once I knew,
The reason for your
Change,
You didn't breathe a word,
Of the other dame.

© 2012 Ramya


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According to me a person has a good & bad side...
most of the times we love someone after seeing their good side...
and make strong bonding..
later we get to know their bad side,when it is already late..
so,before going further than friendship ..try to see their bad side..
Poem is perfectly fine...
ending is sad as i expected...
Keep writing!! :)


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I really enjoyed this, especially the last three stanza's. Those three amazed me, especially the line: "My madness, your gain?" Something about madness just intrigues me. Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is really good, enjoyed the read.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice ryhme scheme from stanza 1 to 3.
its a sad but a nice poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

According to me a person has a good & bad side...
most of the times we love someone after seeing their good side...
and make strong bonding..
later we get to know their bad side,when it is already late..
so,before going further than friendship ..try to see their bad side..
Poem is perfectly fine...
ending is sad as i expected...
Keep writing!! :)


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your poem is one of a flowing river - each word and phrase are short and simple, and that adds to the beautiful rhyme!

The intent is clear, and beautifully expressed through these lines. Love it!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The love, emotion, image for thought and sadness. The work speaks for itself.




Nicely, Nice....

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Kes
So sad!
Great write.
K

Posted 8 Years Ago


nice, but sad - poor girl :) great job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Lovely, but don't be so depressed about a conjugal life. I still enjoyed it after 17 years of marraige and coccoon is still intact. Good luck always

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Added on May 25, 2012
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Tags: the other girl, two timing, heartless, pain, madness, thoughtless

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Ramya
Ramya

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