ukulele

ukulele

A Poem by raven
"

more bullshit

"

i see you shining

but here I’m rotting

you’re radiating

I’m decaying

it’s too hot in here

sweat dripping in my ear

someone’s playing an ukulele

why

© 2016 raven


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M
I don't know if that was your intention but I laughed at the end.

Posted 7 Years Ago


M

7 Years Ago

Cool thank you melon!
I will allow myself to laugh as I read this!
haha(ignore my humo.. read more
raven

7 Years Ago

hahah i like that you are laughing though, don't see why i wouldn't. but if it is the lack of sleep .. read more
M

7 Years Ago

lol thanks much love.
A perfect representation of humanity: How we compare ourselves to others "i see you shining/but here I'm rotting" and the constant thoughts of why on earth "someone's playing an ukulele" while "it's too hot in here" for us.

A short and entertaining read; loved it!

Posted 7 Years Ago


raven

7 Years Ago

thanks for the sweet detailed review!
Maybe they're playing it to take their mind off the heat. lol

Posted 7 Years Ago


raven

7 Years Ago

hahahaha yes it could be
Leaves the reader something to think about... I think the first four lines painted the pain the poet is going through with heartbreak... The ending was kind of different, connected with music and ukulele... Well done frnd...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 7 Years Ago


raven

7 Years Ago

haha thank you for trying to make it sound like i did some nice piece here. i really like your writi.. read more

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