Message From The Stars

Message from the stars

Delivered by the moon

accompanied by light

And a faint, musical tune

A whisper in my ear

An angel came to say

That she will come the other night

To finally take me away

To a land only in stories

Where every dream comes true

where friends are true and good

Even if they are a few

here lost peers finally meet

And talk and play again

Where air is fresh and fragrant

And musical is the rain

A message from the stars

It's gone away it seems

Because such a land

Exists only in my dreams

Author's Note

my head has been in the clouds for quite a while...
:)

Reviews

[Moniba]

Beautifully written... :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Hahahaha, even if your head has been in the clouds, I think that it made for quite a beautiful poem (: this has a really nice flow to it, and a nice rhyme scheme as well. I agree with the other person who mentioned the second stanza, it would make more sense to say "another night" instead of "the other night". Anyways, great job (:

[Aehr]

thank you

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

No problem!

[Mia]

Oh..this is very lovely...you should visit the clouds more often :) I enjoyed it!!

[Aehr]

I did again last night. Were u there too? I think I did see you. I waved to you, but there were so many other heads in the way, i'm not sure you saw me.
:) lol

[Shubham's View]

Short and sweet lines. Nicely rhymed. Thanks for sharing.

[Flutterby aish]

'' To a land only in stories
Where every dream comes true
where friends are true and good
Even if they are a few "
Well I seriously love this one! Nice one Rhea!!!!

[Lina Grey]

that's a wonderful place for your head to be, doll. I like the creativity and the sweetness here, and the desire. It seems almost like a lullaby or nursery rhyme. Cute :)

[eglantine]

2nd stanza I'd change "the other night" to "another night" makes more sense.

Nice rhyming.

[Coyote Poetry]

"Where air is fresh and fragrant
And musical is the rain"
A beautiful poem. I like the desire and the description. Thank you my Poetry friend for sharing your poetry.
Coyote