Don't Fall

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Don't Fall

 

 

 

 

 

 

Don’t hold, too close,
sweet love,
as I am moved, by avarice,
and,
erstwhile beguin.

Don’t covet, sweet whisper,
as I extend,
the depth of your rapacity,
to loosen
and circumscribe,
the bounds
of your constrictions.

Dampen me,
dear love, with the bloom
of freshness,
between louvers minora,
drowning me,
in the sweet sachet
of your bouquet bloom,
and lush,
of flora.

As the thrust, of my evolution
is unfulfilled,
between pant and hollow,
and the holy place,
of secret sanctums.

Origin

measured
by parched labellum
drunken from,
shadow cast,
my development
arisen,
engulfed,
by the sway,
atop pillars potent
of force
and vigor.

Lave me
with passageway,
sodden with weather,
doused visage,
pillowed libido,
tongues braided
in essence,
of carnal, and kiss.

Just don’t fall,
my loves dear,
I am faithful, by hanker,
amorista, sublime,
as I’m lost,
in the love, with,

a sweet reminisce.

 

 

 

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

You confess such a rapturous joy within the presence of your lover...sights, sounds, and scents all mingling to paint wonder's canvas... All this comes to life in your desire to lift and please the one your heart embraces deeply...

[Antonio Valentino]

ahhh what a glorious comment Craig for my meager ramblins.. i only wish i could write as wonderfully as you review.. stay pure my friend it becomes you in all ways true.. :)

[bob, small b. aka invs]

for me, this very nice poem was ruined by the punctuation. commas were placed in inappropriate places, disrupting the proper flow. you would do better to just eliminate all punctuation and use your line breaks as cues for the readers to pause.

[Antonio Valentino]

thank you my friend, although this short choppy kind of format is my style I did write this poem three years ago and noticed it was a little disoriented this morning even for me.. I can only hope that my abilities improve with meaningful and rewarding criticism as your's.. thanks again amigo, i really appreciate it.. :)

[bob, small b. aka invs]

i enjoy the style. short lines. great flow. my problem is with commas in lines like "as the thrust of my evolution" there's no reason to break that line with a comma. likewise, "don't hold too close" and "as i am moved by avarice". as a general rule, i'd say, when in doubt leave them out.

[Antonio Valentino]

sounds good my friend.. im going to have to get some chisels out and maybe a small hammer as well and see what i can mold this hunk of scrap metal into.. i collected the words a long time ago and never gave it the due attention it deserved.. thanks again buddy :)

[Lily Mae]

Just what I said this morning..
"Dampen me,
dear love, with the bloom
of freshness,
between louvers minora"

But where were you? This is another beautiful write from a man who lives it from his heart, mind and soul..xo

[Antonio Valentino]

aww thank you dear friend that was very sweet of you.. haha yes what you said this morning im still laughing.. but most of all.. smiling.. thanks again..

xo :)

[Lily Mae]

xo :)

[Priscilla Sayers]

Your romance envelops the reader. You have such a way of bring beauty and grace to the page. Such love felt through the rhythmic words that soothe and conquer.
Oh, how sweet it is to be reminded of the talent you possess!

[Antonio Valentino]

omg lol i had to dig real deep in the attic for this poem this morning.. written almost three years ago.. it had quite a few views but never any love till now.. thank you dearheart for making it come alive finally.. these poor words never knew the meaning of, acknowledgment, till now.. that was very special of you, thank you :)

[Priscilla Sayers]

My pleasure, Love:)

[Antonio Valentino]

awww.. same here dear friend :)