put shovel to dirt

buried alive, but not for long (alive)

put shovel to dirt

 

i wake up in a box

feeling cold, clammy and

hungry.

hearing muffled voices

laughing in loud booms as

a new sound emerges from the

Over, with me the Under.

 

it sounds like waves of liquid mud

jumping on my stiffened body

without hitting me at all.

the sound multiplies as the

laughter spills over now

into faded noise,

the laughter of the dead.

 

the sounds become louder

and more distant,

which makes no sense. But

how much sense is needed

when one is buried

alive

in a shallow box of hell?

 

dan © 2014

Reviews

[BeeBev]

Very descriptive and i love how you portrayed the macabre concept. Will be reading more of your work so keep writing!

[dan]

BeeBev, And I have bookmarked your page and will be visiting later tonite to return the favor. Thanks for the read/review. take care...dan

[MsJewel]

The images you have created are so vivid and the result is quite chilling. "the shallow box of hell" - as Jacob commented - this could be buried in emotions, or perhaps buried in fear, hatred...there are so many layers...
Again, a brilliant piece of writing Dan. You are quite talented!

:) Julie

[dan]

Julie, Actually I'm being given credit for, as you call it "so many layers" when it's actually straightforward; I watched an old movie on TV where someone is getting buried alive and I find that so frightening that this write resulted. I can't take credit for something I didn't write. Thank you, anyway, for the read/review. take care...dan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we sometimes get buried in our own emotions...others burying us causing the sound to diminish...but then our own thoughts get louder...and it is hell for sure.

[dan]

Jacob, I saw a scene in an old movie on TV in which someone was buried alive. (shudder~~) Dying in any way can't be pleasant but I think that would be the worst. I think you are giving me too much credit for the thoughts leading me to write this, but thank you for doing so. (I could have said, "Yeah, that's exactly what I meant"....but I owe you my honesty) Thanks for the read/review. take care...dan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes we have themes in our subconscious we don't even know exist there.

[dan]

Well, thank you again, sir! dan