The Blame

I was in a bizarre mood when I wrote this. Please excuse if it's s****y.

As beasts know to do,

run in packs

not in zoos;

Every torch has been passed

through the night, cold as ice.

The remains flash like sparks,

rotting through, like the dark,

which envelopes each corpse,

blood trails tracing the lights.

 

As the trails lead away on

each subsequent day,

my own memories remain,

trapped in ice

like the pain…

Exposing each night and

revealing its shame,

I am claiming the blame and

soft-pedaling all

 pain.

 

dan © 2015

Music: "What I've Done," by Linkin Park

Author's Note

Reviews

[Confuser]

Dan: It is dark, raw...and very good. I was trapped in there with the beautiful music, like your words grabbed me: Life can be tough! It very good writing and I thank you! Dale

As the trails lead away on
each subsequent day,
my own memories remain,
trapped in ice
like the pain…
Powerful visual!

[dan]

Dale, Dark has been my medium for the past few weeks, no real reason why. I think my dark writings are cathartic in helping me to deal with the darkness in my life's journey, not always a pleasure cruise. Always nice to hear from you, thank you for the kind words. take care...dan

[Confuser]

I never promised you a rose garden; correct adage. Told my husband what you said about the weather; soon the sun will shine and hopefully help deal with some of the darkness..Y/W..you take care

[Isabel25]

It really is very dark. Brilliant wordings, they somehow stab you when you read them.

Memories have a cruel way of entrapping you and strangling you slowly, painfully. It is very much necessary that we learn to live with them and deal with them. It certainly is not s****y, it is a work of art. You have mentioned 'ice' more than once, thus referring to the coldness that you are going through. You express well Dan :) Bravo!

[dan]

I like using the image of ice in my writing since it connotes many different meanings, depending on its use. And I agree; memories are often a double-edged sword and can sometimes be bent by the mind into shapes that were never intended. Your reviews are always so insightful, I thank you for that. take care...dan

[Isabel25]

My pleasure Dan :)

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It's always darkest before the dawn. You're more than aware of it. love the intensity of your focus

[dan]

lynn, Thank you so much for the read and review. I appreciate your time. Why don't you send me read requests for your writes? I have a hard time keeping up with reviewing, requesting I read something is one way to be sure I will review your work. Can you do that? Thank you. take care...dan

[RiverRei]

This was lovely. Yes, lovely even for it's dark nature. I can relate to this and it seems I can relate to a lot of your work. I have Dissociative Identity Disorder so I have episodes that can create situations like this, where you're acting more on instinct than anything else. It may not be my fault, but I still have to deal with the consequences and take the fault. It can be very frustrating and very painful. Thank you for sharing this.

[dan]

River, We're in the same misunderstood boat then. I have bipolar disorder, anxiety disorder with obsessive-compulsive disorder features, and a bit of a problem with attention/concentration. A regular alphabet soup of disorders, meds and inpatient stays. I hope that you are coping with your disorder better than I do with mine. Thank you for the review. take care...dan

[RiverRei]

I do the best I can with what I'm given lol. I take anxiety/depression meds every day and I definitely have a bit of OCD (not an extreme case), and ADHD myself, so I know how you feel. I have manged to stay out of the hospital for my conditions though. Not sure how haha. I'm here if you want to talk though :)

[dan]

same here. dan

[Matching Socks]

Wow, much darker than I'm used to seeing from you.
I think you've done well here Dan. I did giggle at your 's****y' remark.
I don't think you're capable of producing anything s****y.
The last two lines struck me. Someone has to step up and claim responsibility for events that go wrong, but few have the courage to and it is so counter productive. Soft-pedaling all pain. Almost like smoothing things over? That's how I read it. Well done.

[dan]

I was in a surreal mood writing this, a lot of my writes lean toward darkness...it just seems I'm being more of a realist when describing my life and thoughts that way. Self-blame is a big component in my life's story. Thank you for your kind words. take care...dan

[Matching Socks]

You're welcome. :)

[Alfred Kukitz]

No s**t here. I, too, blame me for many things. I call it getting in the way of yourself. Happens frequently, it's part of my pattern. I let go or else the errors would crawl up my spine.

Nice write!

Regards,
Al

[wordman]

like turning into the werewolf when the moon is full

[dan]

HOWWLLLLL...my bark's worse than my bite, whatever that means. Thanks for the review. take care...dan

[wordman]

you are welcome dan

[Kelly Scheppers]

I failed to see the "s****y"...

Dan, I'm going to keep this simple, and honest...you are one hell of a writer! There's so much to applaud about your talent. I'm just thrilled that other's see what I do!


My best,
Kelly

[dan]

That's nice of you to say, Kelly but I don't think being applauded is one of my strong suits. I'm the one who slips off into the corner, just blending. I do appreciate your very nice words and thank you for the kind review. take care...dan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

claiming the blame, owning up to it, helps us release ourselves, free ourselves...to run with the pack...

and that is what we were meant to do..

the imagery is interesting in this...reminds me of the film "Wolf" with jack nicholson and michelle pffeifer....

and eeriness to the write that i really got into ....

[dan]

Yeah I tend to be a self-implicator. The blame game is always on target when it's self-inflicted. I've never seen that movie but any movie with Jack in it is OK by me. I mentioned that I was in a weird mood, it probably explains the eeriness. I appreciate the kind review. take care...dan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and if you were to check out "Wolf" you would be amazed how your poem parallels it or vice-versa.read moreand if you were to check out "Wolf" you would be amazed how your poem parallels it or vice-versa.

jacob

[....................]

It is definitely not "s****y" dan (the description made me laugh). Letting go of what we do and claiming all blame is more easily said than done and to those who are capable then I say to them: "Well-Done!" As usual you have selected a relevant piece to accompany your words - nicely done, too. One day at a time my friend, one day at a time!

[dan]

FT, Yeah I tend to be a self-blamer at times, a weird character flaw. For some reason this felt cathartic to write. Thanks for the review. take care...dan