just walk away

"nothing more to see here, folks....just walk away (from the devastation)"

your aura chased me down

and dragged me back in

from the cold,

but then the welcome act grew old

you pulled the slickened mat

to watch me fall.

so now, while breathing fire you fan

those flames to

make them grow;

would you please back off?

just walk away,

just leave and let me go.

 

the pride you’ve made me swallow,

choking strangles

me within.

the heart that’s in my throat,

beating slower, ever closer

to demise.

so now, while looking backward, I’ve got

no substantial reason

to forgive;

please see it in your heart again…

then just walk away

and let me live.

 

dan © 2015

Music: "Walk Away," by the James Gang

Author's Note

Reviews

[Mara]

Powerful write, i love the rhyming, and it makes us think back to our first loves, they are always the hardest to part from, im glad that you've found peace now!

[dan]

Yeah, back when I was young and stupid high expectations led to painful stumbles. A young guy has to learn that just receiving a look from a girl he likes doesn't mean love. Thanks for the kind words. take care...dan

[Kelly Scheppers]

You never, ever forget your first love...or so I am told! Good for you that she walked away, Dan...you never would have met your wife!

These old loves certainly make for some mighty fine poetry! ; )

[dan]

It was funny, I hadn't thought about that girl in ages until today there was a local news story about someone with the exact same name. Caused just a wee bit of a cringe. Thanks so much for the read/review. take care...dan

[Robert]

Reads as a very personal emotional piece Dan. I hope the hurt is mostly gone now. But this piece shos what it was like at least in a glimpse.

[dan]

Some scars fade but never quite disappear. This one left a mark. Thanks so much for the read/review. take care...dan

[ANTO]

"the heart that’s in my throat,
beating slower, ever closer
to demise." - gut-wrenching imagery Dan.
- The end of a chapter and the beginning of a new one.

Thanks for the RR my friend.

[dan]

ANTO, Thank you so much for your time and read/review. Even we happily married folks can recall past heart-stomps ruefully. I've had a long day, after this I'm heading for MY couch to do what you and your dog are doing in your pic. But I have no dog, my ferret's already asleep in his cage-hammock. Thanks again. take care...dan

[Confuser]

Dan: Great rhyme and flow and what an emotional ride...you said every word, simply perfectly. I loved it all. Sounds like someone got their heart drug around and finally had enough. Great title, and I especially like the last few lines, let me live..Loved it. Great writing. Dale

[dan]

A simple story of an 18-yo dumbass kid, first love and a nut-crushing girl warming up for future heartbreaking. 40 years ago and still some residual pain...and embarrassment. Thank you for the kind words. take care...dan

[Confuser]

Great writing! You're welcome, but thank you.

[Matching Socks]

The walking away is difficult no matter who is doing it.
Sometimes for the best though, even if it doesn't seem that way...

[dan]

That first heartbreak is a tough nut to crack, leaving a mark that can still sting a bit 40 years later. I sound really stupid, don't I? Thanks so much for the read/review. take care...dan

[Matching Socks]

No, you don't. :)
I think you'll find many who agree.
I'm not quite there yet in age but I'm already having regrets about past loves and such...

[...]

I'm confused, Dan. Why didn't you walk away if she wouldn't. Property involved? Kids? Anyway, I'm glad that at least it's over now. I assume you are talking about the past because you seem happy with the present. An intense and uniquely YOU write, as always...lynn

[dan]

lynn, I was really young, first-love and all that...a stupid kid allowing a cold-hearted girl to sharpen her talons for bigger saps later in her life. Huh...40 years and it still hurts. Thank you for your kind words. take care...dan

[....................]

fanning flames of pain and hanging around to watch the demise of another is truly cruel... it is only an evil person that lets someone suffer... better to simply leave and let that person find some semblance of life... well-said, Dan!

[dan]

FT, This is actually about a young lady who dumped me way back when. A woman was mentioned on the local news today that had the same name...resurrecting old demons! And she thought she had gotten away with it, did she? Thanks for the read/review. take care...dan

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Very well written. Keep it coming.

[dan]

IM, Thanks again for your kind words. take care...dan

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You are welcome