The slow dance

The slow dance

 

 

They met on the dance floor,

never asking the others name.

 

They were drawn to each other,

by a mutual desire.

 

Silently their finger intertwined,

their hearts beat like the rushing of a wild river.

 

Could you smell Jasmine or honeysuckle in the air?

Could you feel them floating.

 

Not a word was spoken between the two,

who needs words when their bodies spoke volumes.

 

Silently they danced as if the night would last forever,

and in their hearts, the memory of tonight will.

 

Lips brushed as breathless sighs took hold.

Fingers reached to feel.

 

They glided across the floor like two Angels in a slow whirl wind of bliss.

The moon was their only light, how full it seemed that night.

 

Her gown flowed like feathers in the soft wind.

His uniform crisp, but did not faultier.

 

The birds sang a waltz,

as the butterflies danced above them to make two halos.

 

The night stood still, mesmerized by their love.

How could the moon ever give way to sunrise at this moment?

 

The wind brushed her hair,

his eyes sparkled with her reflection.

 

They danced all night,

they danced as time slowed down, only for them.

 

When the moon could no longer keep the sunrise from coming,

the mist floated in and carried them away.

 

On a moonlight night as the Jasmine and honeysuckle fill the air,

you will see them...

dancing slowly in the mist.

Reviews

[Matthew Bosko]

"Who needs words when their bodies spoke volumes"

Strongest line in the poem. Nice job.

[ron]

Thank you Matthew.

[Brianna Brie]

Not only did you paint a clear picture, but the characters are believable. I so can see the two of them in love. Lovely poem!

[ron]

Thank you Brianna. You are most kind.

[Lyn Anderson]

A gorgeous, romantic. sensual verse. And I think I found something interesting. Your style flows nicely sans apostrophes all together. Just leave em out ...:)

[ron]

Thank you. So I should leave the apostrophes out when I write?

[Lyn Anderson]

In this flowing style where they seem unnecessary, in my opinion, it definitely works.

[ron]

Wow. I am humbled by you suggestion. Thank you.

[Lyn Anderson]

I think it might be an answer for you. If you even look at the poem, it looks neater and cleaner. Maybe that is it, Ron, to let it flow with less punctuation and interruption.

[ron]

I will try that thank you KL your suggestions and opinions mean so much to me.

[Lyn Anderson]

No, thank you for sharing your unique style and clever romantic wit.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very romantic piece of poetry...reminds me of what steven wright once said "dancing is a horizontal expression of a perpendicular desire"---

[ron]

I don't know who Steven Wright is but that sounds about right. Thank you Jacob.

[Cerise]

very beautifully written...the image u create feels soo real..amazingly described...phenomenal work....

[ron]

Wow thank you fancy.

[Cryingkate]

Ron,
This is Beautiful, reminds me of my "Meet Me Here in The Garden" scene
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Cryingkate/1066389/

Wow I love the Soul/Spirit stuff.....Loved it, Loved it.
Thanks so much for bringing life to this.

[ron]

Thank you so very much Kate...:)

[Frieda P]

Like a scene from a movie, ron. Oh this reminds me of an Officer and A Gentleman or Al Pacino's tango for some reason...very romantic scene you've painted here ron, love the Jasmine and honeysuckle air...

[ron]

Thank you Frieda. Kind of just closed my eyes and tried to describe what I was seeing and feeling. Never saw the second movie.

[Frieda P]

OMG you never saw Scent of A Woman, you must! My pleasure ron.

[ron]

I'll leave the remarks about the movie title alone...lol.

[Frieda P]

At least watch the clip....*sigh* Tango on.....................

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F2zTd_YwTvo

[ron]

I will try but my computer doesn't like doing things like that. It's not a hopeless romantic like me...:)

[Frieda P]

Tell your computer to put its big boys pants on for this one haha ;-)

[ron]

Lol. I would but I never took a second language and I don't think it speaks American....:)
Just a whole bunch of ones and zeros.

[Frieda P]

Scooby do waffles, I think big boy pants come in every language. ;-)

[ron]

What? No one told me anything about that. Ok who hid the office MEMO about that from me.

[Frieda P]

You're always too busy running around those redwoods haha

[Vidya Bacchus]

Damn redwood gets me everytime lol.I really should grow up lol

[Frieda P]

Now what the fook fun would that be? haha

[Vidya Bacchus]

You got a point.Can't be good when you are the voice of reason lol

[ron]

Hey its not like I have moss growing at the base of my redwood...hmm wait...Holy cow its dark red moss, how the heck did that get there?

[ron]

Its thick to. Keep back with the weed eaters your two.

[ron]

Wait how did we end up talking like this with a romantic poem....

[Vidya Bacchus]

Ha mossy redwood then lol ?

[Frieda P]

I hate to tell you ron but you're doing most of the yakking...............................

[Vidya Bacchus]

I never know why we do what we do lol

[ron]

I feel so used....:(
lol

[Vidya Bacchus]

Right chica.It really wasn't me this time lol

[ron]

Ok I'm writing a new poem. I will call it "RED WOOD the MOSS man" or just "Redwood"

[Vidya Bacchus]

You know that could just make it worst .I would love to read that though lol

[ron]

You two are so bad, now you got me doing it.

[ron]

If you were here right now I would spank the two of you until you learned your lessen.

[Vidya Bacchus]

In your dreams Red .I think your hands would be way to full to do any spanking lol

[ron]

Oh I make sure I am the last to be pleased...:) I posted it.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Okay .You brought this on yourself.Don't say I didn't warn you lol

[ron]

Hmm maybe or maybe not...:)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Haha you so bad lol

[s y e]

Oh this is so utterly beautiful and breath taking... Just wow. You leave me speechless. Definitely a romantic at heart my dear friend. I could see it all on my screen, so vivid, so beautiful so... perfect.

[ron]

Thank you Sye. You and Vidya are going to make me blush so hard I will be permanently red in the face.

[s y e]

Ha, like a tomato?

[ron]

Yes like a tomato...lol

[s y e]

Hahaha, that's too funny. I wanna see the face of a tomato on a dude. ;-)

[ron]

Lol. It makes my freckles a lighter shade of red then my skin.

[s y e]

Hahahaaha, I had freckles when I was younger! :-O

[ron]

I have so many you wouldn't believe it.

[s y e]

I was covered until I got into a daily 'facial' routine, ha.

[ron]

My Mom always said they were where the Angels kissed me. Not sure about that but I still have them. Kind of look like I have chicken pocks lol.

[s y e]

Awh, that's too cute, Ron! :-) Nawww, I don't think it does look like that.

[ron]

Ether that or a whole bunch of ants gave me hickeys..lol

[s y e]

Bahahahaha, ants give hickeys? That must be what's on my neck ;-)

[ron]

Lol. Ya I think the scientific name for the ants is " antus-lovus-hickeious" not sure I could have spelled it wrong. I think they were found by the Romans. Could be wrong though.

[s y e]

Woah, dude - that is dead cool. I have ant hickeys, heheehhehehe

[ron]

Your making me laugh so hard Sye.

[s y e]

I am in hysterics just the thought makes me laugh too hard. I am gonna tell my gran I have a hickey then when she goes nuts I tell her it was by ants....lmfao.

[ron]

OMG Sye your bad :)

[s y e]

Haha, you just realised? ;-)

[ron]

Well I didn't want to say anything but I guess the cat is out of the bag.

[s y e]

Heck they all know here. I am a bad Noodle (sounds wrong, whoops)

[ron]

NO you are not a bad Noodle. You are a sweet Noodle...that needs to be pulled out of the hot water.

[s y e]

Ha, funny. I'm in boiling hot water.... Yikes.

[ron]

No not yet your not...lol

[s y e]

Ok, well I'm not really but I'm happy where I am....? ;-)

[ron]

That's a good place to be ;-)

[s y e]

I think so too. For now anyway, aha.

[maria ( rose)]

On a moonlight night as the Jasmine and honeysuckle fill the air,
you will see them...
dancing slowly in the mist.
I could see it!!..love how you make this poem come alive, another amazing write ..wow blows me away Great Job!!

-maria

[ron]

Thank you Maria you are far to kind :)

[maria ( rose)]

a smile for you :) enjoy your day/night,chat soon.

[ron]

Smiles back to you :) I will try ...:)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Dreamy and oh so sweet.I can almost smell jasmine and honeysuckle.You are too romantic my dear .Very cool :)

[ron]

-blushes- thank you Vidya :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You blushing Red ?

[ron]

Yes I am...;)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Be still my beating heart lol

[ron]

ok you just want me to blush a bright red now don't you? :)))

[Vidya Bacchus]

I live to make you blush .It is my finest hobby lol

[ron]

I have no doubt it is...:)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You know me well lol

[ron]

Maybe, maybe not. Will see...;)