On My Radar

On My Radar

 

There you are

A blip on my screen

A glowing green dot

Suggesting you really do exist

And looking for clearance to land

My runway is alight

Lower your landing gear

And taxi on over to my gate

Reviews

[Wise Man]

If I understood it correctly, I loved how you incorporated yourself into the story! Not many people succesfully can add themselves in a methaphorical way that doesn't steal away from the main point of the story. You added yourself as a character, no the main character, and I loved that.

[~]

Loved this Rubie! A great vintage point from the tower of control :D

smiles to you!!

[rubie]

Thank you so much for stopping by and leaving a kind word. Glad you enjoyed it!

[~]

vantage** i meant and you are welcome :D

[Kelly Scheppers]

"...suggesting you really do exist"

Now there's a line I can relate to...awesome take on this one, Rubie!

[rubie]

So glad you could relate!
Thanks for your kind review!

[Miss Sharon]

I love this Rubie! Goddess of simile and metaphor you are indeed. Love your work! ~Sharon

[rubie]

Thank you so much for such a kind review!
Much appreciated!!

[Miss Sharon]

You are most welcome my dear! ~SP

[Adam Adams]

Beautiful poetry you've come up with!

So.. if I play with the analogy of art, i'd like to see "Radar" as "heart" where your lover blips ov'r the beam of its cascades (.. on screen) & wanders across the land of your heartbeats (which're compared with "taxi gates") for getting stored (.. clearance to land) deep into the fathom of love-lights. Quite fascinating to read! Nice imagery!

[rubie]

I like how you've read into the metaphor and seen so much more!
Thank you for you kind review!

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This is a sweet, sensual, hug, Rubie :) Quite beautiful!

[rubie]

Thank you so much, lynn!

[Daydreamer]

I appreciate all your work. This piece was sophisticated - your elegance and class shined through with this write.

[rubie]

Thank you so much for your review. It is much appreciated.

[MsJewel]

I love your use of metaphor in this sweet romantic little gem.

:) Julie

[rubie]

Thank you for visiting my page again, and for your very kind review...

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This is such a sensual, metaphorical write, Rubie...I love it!!

[rubie]

Appreciate the kind words, FT. Had a bit of fun with this one...

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You are welcome and I can tell... :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what a great metaphor....love the way you carry it all the way through this nice, tight, powerful love poem....

j.

[rubie]

thank you for such a kind review, my friend.