Darkness and light

The light from the moon shone into my room
But dark clouds covered my heart
The stars twinkled brightly
But only darkness lived in me

People smiled around me
People's laughter surrounded me
But I only saw frowns
And tears

I can hear joyous singing off in the distance
But all I hear are the sobs of the brokenhearted
People dance with delight
But all I can see is their pain and weakness

I see the one I used to love smile at me
But all I see in him is betrayal
I catch glimpses of light
But as quickly as they appear they disappear just as quickly

Author's Note

an experiment

Reviews

[What happened to simple..]

this is the first poem you've given me to read that I really did enjoy; there was more going on, description and contrasts than the other ones where your writing has been sorrowful and sort of plain. The looking inside is nice, the darkness that empowers you here =) xx

[Misty Blue Eyes]

very good write.. i like it

[HopelesslyDevoted]

i think this is one of your best poems yet! this my fav of all the ones you've written!

[Nothing Personal]

As negativity dominates, even the streaks of happiness disappears. This is so true when we are gripped by incalculable sadness, we push all the positive feelings way. Good theme choice! Enjoyed it

[Coyote Poetry]

A very sad poem. You create a feeling of sadness and disappointment. A very strong poem. If the purpose was loneliness and sad hearts. The emotion was reached. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Intern'l Shultzfeather]

Emotional intensity with you Sarah for this burning lad who should be burned in turn--a shouldered jet pack pre-set for the cheaters trash pile. You provoke a response in some readers that makes them want to protect the main character in the poem.

[Rikkevi Rue]

i like that it has more of a coalescent quality to it, there are not quite rhymes, but the hint of rhymes...amazing how even the promise of aesthetics can carry one!