Secrets

I feel the words in my head
I feel them in my heart
I see your face
And I want to let them out

But for a reason
Unknown to me
And reason I have yet to find
I simply can't say them

I let them swirl around my mind
They float there
Yelling for me to just tell you
To just allow myself to fall

I see the words
But I still am unable
To piece them all together
To form the words I wish to say

I see you holding me
Loving me like no one else ever has
Caring for me in a way only you could
Seeing who I am on the inside

I see it all
And I wish I could write it all down
I wish I could share it with others
But a reason unknown to me

I'm not allowed....

So these pictures
These words
These thoughts
Will forever stay a secret in my mind....

Author's Note

I am a true romantic simply can't help it

Reviews

[ivizarx]

Really awesome write, you are one with great potential in the romantic subject of poetry. And no worries, the things you're good at thinking about is the best things to write about.
as for constructive criticism, there's a grammar error on line 7, should be "find" instead of "fine". Also, try writing on a meter, I think that if this were written on one it would've really brought it out, not to say your structure is a negative, but that there's always room for improvement. Another suggestion is metaphors, they really add "kick" to poetry like no other. It takes lots of imagination but work likes a muda F***a if you can get 'em in lol. Did enjoy it. you are really a great writer and all my reviews, take 'em with a grain of salt n no worries. really glad you sent me an RR.

[Rikkevi Rue]

a clearly true write with a touching honesty. Made more interesting by the "not telling" leaving the reader to contemplate...

[Dushyant Thadani]

Very beautiful... I love the way you write romantic poems... Honest and beautiful... Great job...

[EmeraldFacet]

This is very sweet :-)

[Maya Storm]

This is my favorite piece of work from you Sarah. It is filled with such emotion and innocent romanticism. The wish, the wants I feel what you have holding in your heart and mind, what it is your are finding hard to say out loud.

You tease the readers, we think that you'll say it at the end and then...
you hold on to it.

Beautifully written. Bravo!

[M Garcia]

Being a true romantic is nothing to be ashamed of. This is a great write! Keep 'em coming.