A NIGHT WITHOUT LIFE...

A NIGHT WITHOUT MY LIFE....

A Night without life .....

very meaningless to think about 

Think over

 

As if someone had chained me 

cannot breath 

cannot inhale ......

very cruel to think about

 

 

As if there were no eyes 

no hands just living ....

very inhuman to think about

 

 

As if there was no head 

no heart  no mind  no brains 

WANT TO GO FOREVER ....

very unrealistic to think about

 

 

As if there were no answers 

all questions mystries  puzzles 

just nobody to help solve .....

very shameful to think about

 

 

As if there was no Love 

no affection admiration  no Pampering ...

No lights no sun 

no me no you ...just noone .....

very sabbatical to think about

 

 

As if there was no GOD 

no prayers  no destiny 

no definitions  just twillight ...

very sacrilege to think about

 

 

As if the wait will be forever 

no moon  no stars 

no time limits no tickling of clocks 

just everything stopped ....

very cumbersome to think about

 

A Night Without Life ....

very meaningless to think about ....

How do you think .........?

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I could not get pass the "No"...kept ringing in my head lie a bell...I would restructure this one...to give it more impact in the lines...as a reader you have too in a long line of thought...especially the way you designed this give a quick though as one reads the lines:

A Night without life .....
very meaningless to think about,
Think over
As if someone had chained me ,
cannot breath ,
cannot inhale ......
very cruel to think about

See what I mean about the impact now...up to you...

[SAGAR]

Yes indeed. It sounds more meaningless now. Thanks once again.... Brilliant insight

[Joseph Eluzai]

How about a life without night? Meaningless, too, I guess. A great way to provoke thoughts against the obvious.

[SAGAR]

Indeed. Though a little sarcastic but it is always beautiful to plough a field where there is no sand. I really loved the imaginative line you have put forth " A life without Night"; would love to attempt that....Best of Lucks ....

[Margret Sent]

I can't even explain it but this poem speaks to me in so many ways. I love every line.

[SAGAR]

It certainely does. You have indeed found the factual feel in this poem. Thanks and Best of Lucks..