my heart

 

 

I open my heart for you
  

I mess up things.
  

Mistakes. They happen 
 

Then my heart sinks
 

I feel bad.

but i never find

the right words.
  

you forgive me
 

I mess up things again.
 

With your big heart.

and your kindness.
 

I find the right words

Thank you.

Author's Note

Any Comments?

Reviews

[Ron]

Seems like this is a young person's first writings. It may be English is not Flowers first language. If so this poem is promising as the English is very good. Perhaps this work talks about a friend or a parent who knows. There is a quiet sincerity which is appealing. Naturally maturity in age brings maturity and confidence in poetry. A sound start I would say. I shall never know why she should want me to be her friend! However, I thank you for the invitation. Recommend you read Lola Nation on this site for swift improvrment. Check out Thurston & Little Mermaid too.

[YouoweYoupay]

good start, kid. =) keep writing.

[thoughts of jade]

its simply constructed and conveys what youre trying to say

[Archaos Broductions]

i mostly dont like poems, but I get what your saying in this poem :)
It was a very good read id like to see another one of your poems

[flowers_roses]

any comments?? :'(