we've changed

since the day i died                     (mentaly died)
no-ones shed a tear or cried

 i had barely made it by
trying to avoid their lies
its soo sad i see their lives
they see me, judge, and despise
makes me glad i'm through their eyes
i see through all their denys
what to do? leave them behind
and get the f*** on with my life..
..they like to tell me that i'm wrong
the anger makes me feel alive
and plus its still the same old song
each time i sing it, more deprived
they say i changed alot from long 
..I just say i'm living life
and their just home and getting high
my thoughts derranged that aint a lie
so yea i "changedd" i cant deny
you will one day when you live life
i've learned my lessons as time flys
i have my moments i despise
i've been in arguments and fights 
some things i say may not be right
you judge too much not by my side
you ain't around, so think those lies
so i say now get out my life 
sick of s*** talking from my right
what is corrupted is your sight
well it is actually ur mind
you know it all but their all lies

 

Reviews

[AMP]

Hmn... I must say there's alot of good in this piece. Good being that it's a poem with true feeling, and it does it's job of conveying that feeling in the mind of the reader. This sounds alot like something I can relate to... Deffinitely the line on anger. From beginning to end, this incites those burried demons... Well done.

Now... I have to say that, just for readability's sake, you may want to consider changing up the rhyme sheme a bit. Though one line feeds off the other, I think there may be a better way to word it so as to enhance the flow. But that's just me.