Distance

Distance sees through you’re disguise  
How many times will you run away? 
Only you can save yourself 
I see you from a distance 
Dancing slowly in the dark 
In your beautiful serenity  
Yet you are too afraid to see 
Your lonely takes the place of pain 
Slowly you twirl around in a empty room 
Waiting for someone who takes your hand 
Leaving you wanting more 
Alone is your addiction 
Having trouble breathing  
All the tears you have cried 
Buried deep down  
Where no one can find it 
Dancing alone with bitter music  
Closed eyes taken far away 
From a dreary world  
A ghost of what you were once 

Reviews

[BLACK PRINCE]

I think in the first line you meant YOUR DISGUISE
It's YOUR without an apostrophe.
Because YOU'RE is short for YOU ARE.

And in line 8 you wrote ' Your lonely takes the place of pain.'

I think you meant, ' Your loneliness takes the place of pain.'

I LIKE TO BE HONEST TO HELP OTHER POETS :)


WELL DONE!!

[rivers]

Wow Lily,
I have only been reading your writing for a few days and you're really doing well. You seem to be able to capture a depth of emotions darker side without really leaving the reader with troubling angst...This is easy to relate to as one who ruminates my darker side...I'll be listening...

[Distant horizons]

This strikes a hauntingly familiar chord with me. I can see myself in this, if i was being brutally honest with myself. Beautifully penned. So tragic and bittersweet the words you convey.