into pieces

brush against my bark

[i will surrender] ...and fall

into your waters

Reviews

[Jamee' M. Hall]

Amazing

[Pierce Franklin]

One of the best and most original haikus I think I've ever seen, certainly on this site. Superb.

[Maxinne Marie]

Beautiful. =)

[Trisha Clark]

You're amazing.

[Yira Simone]

I liked this very much. great imagery and you sure kept within the syllable count. I love the idea here of how you are willing to crumble into love and be swept away by this person. Very deep for so few words. Great work!

[Teresa Gunn]

Why does no one write haiku nowadays?
I like Haiku... or at least this one.

[Gar Avoch]

I like this one
Gar

[Ted]

The short ones say the most.