jigsaw

i'm wanting something you could never give.

 

silently whimpering for you to touch me

(already feeling your lips upon my skin)

 

eyelids shiver shut:

 

alone.

 

i can not sleep;

i am re-arranging the world in my mind

 

moving around the puzzle pieces

to fit.

 

i feel your fingers through my hair:

alas, you are

not there.

 

i throw out the extra pieces -

the camouflaged, endless expanses

of trees, or sky, or green.

 

yet i realize the picture will never be complete

without them.

 

i could sit here, re-arranging.

yes i could do this forever...

 

secretly admiring

the way

we fit together.

 

 

 

Reviews

[fireblossom]

this isn't about true love

this is about wanting something and the fantasy of control

life puzzle is never complete we can only effect one or two pieces as the rest scramble away...

only the moment of intertwining passion seems real and it ends

life is lived in between those moments

learning to live well in between is an art

[D. Elizabeth]

I loved this piece for it's honesty. It's beauty and the down right amazing way you tied/ excuse me strung the words together! Kudos -D.E.

[Kelly D. Burris]

Savoring a beautiful friendship, tasting the good parts is good. Dwelling too long can be heartbreaking. I like the gentle feel and flow if this. A bittersweet feeling.

[Jason]

Terrific write Kara, like always. Sometimes wanting someone to 'just change one or two things' so that you could be together seems realistic and even possible. However, just like a puzzle, it would never be complete. Great, GREAT write.
~jason

[W.k.kortas]

One little spelling gremlin--"camouflaged". It's a very tightly drawn and nicely executed metaphor. The structure--the short lines, the spacing between the stanzas--give it a start-and-stop kind of feel that mirrors the notion of being unable to sleep. A very interesting concept, a nicely constructed piece of writing.

[Pinky]

Love the flow.... very deep!

[Travis Lawrence]

There is a sense of waste here, like playing a puzzle is not worth your time. But then, I read it again, and you seem content to stay and "do this forever." I also like how the pieces are your wsorld, "the camaflauged, endless expanses / of trees, or sky, or green." The metaphor is well done. Really good work, as always, I enjoy reading your poetry.

[Mr. Lopez]

Kara's back! This came across as a bit lonely with a touch of fantasy. To me anyways. Like a young girl writing the last name of her crush along with hers just to see how it would look like on paper.Mrs' so and so. Cute and creative as usual. I could be way off , It wouldn't be the first time . LOL

[Lee W. Deason]

A step up from the K. E. K I know. Good communication. Captured more pure so to say.

eyelids shiver shut:



alone.



i can not sleep;

i am re-arranging the world in my mind



moving around the puzzle pieces

to fit.

�Lee�

[robin]

Endless puzzling in lovers' mystery. I love the sound of your thoughts when I read these words, flow of surface things getting swallowed up in the dreaming and the possibilities of ever changing pictures. Wonderfully concise, who would not want to be this other?

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Amazing once again as you capture that loneliness when you long for someone that you can't quite reach though you feel the love you have is enough for both of you... it like losing that one important piece of the puzzle that will make the world whole and right.

i could sit here, re-arranging.
yes i could do this forever...

secretly admiring
the way
we fit together

and this ending oh my how heartbreaking.