through the fog

 

i drove through the fog
to hold you /
to mold you to the curves
of my smile.
to lay you upon linens
and purr beside you
as we slip into silky sleep.

i drove through the fog
to kiss you
with the tender tendency of time.
as it slips away / i embrace the ways
and the days that you are mine.
in this hidden haven
tucked into the corners
of the sky.

i drove through the fog
to reach you
with the slow measure
of momentary calm.
knowing soon i would fold you
into the pockets of
my palms.
then kiss the secret
shadows
of your seas.

I drove through the fog
to touch you
with the gentle eyelash
of my heart.
to nourish you softly
with the nectar from
my lips.
we could learn the taste of
something
sweet and new.

it took me a while,
but i drove through the fog...

i drove through the fog
to you.

Reviews

[Sarah Williams]

This oozes with beautiful romance... Each line seemed to top the one before it, until finally I came to the end and I was left wanting more! There are just too many exquisit lines for me to site all of the ones that I like. There is something about driving through the fog (something that I did quite often when I was going to college) and dreaming of being with the one that you love that is truly magical. Great work!

[Leah Simone]

mold you to the curves
of my smile.

hidden haven
tucked into the corners
of the sky.

i would fold you
into the pockets of
my palms.


Ok, those were my top three favorite parts in what I feel is the best poem I have read of yours. This is gorgeous and your sweet voice purrs like a kitten! - Leah

[Natase J. Hopkins]

wow! emily this poem i can hear being sung beautifully by some angelic voice, well I do exactly what it speaks of...which making love. Loved the imagery.

[Antony]

Hi Emily,
This was one of the most wonderful, sweet and delicate imageries of making love. I can actually feel this happening. Such tenderness, is what got to me.

[Djf]

beautiful...makes me feel dreamy.

[M. J. C. Mata]

thanks for your greetings.

there is only one word i could think of when i read your poem- Lovely!

[Everyday Is Just Anothe..]

this is really cool, and I love how you've added a voice.

[I.R.]

Love the rhythm in this poem and the use of alliteration and other sound devices (ex. "tender tendency of time"). The images and diction are fresh, like the soft eyelash of the heart. Pretty good. The only things that I found was a probable cliche: "the nectar from my lips." It borders on the cliche but then it all depends on the reader. Other than that, great piece :]

[Shannon K.]

Very niv=cely done. *applaud*. I love your imagery and wording here. It is all so expressive and unique. Very well done. You took a quite commonly used topic, love, and transformed into a wonderfull piece of work that all readers will be capable of enjoying. Superbly well done.
S.k.

[Night_dragonfly]

This is a poem of beauty. I like the way that you have the reader feel every word.

[Davi]

i loved this. to me it seems like you use the fog as a metaphor for all the complications in a relationship. your words are very deep and intense