sunshine through the blinds

the sunshine has imbedded horizontal lines
against her skin;
violating the distance she has placed between
herself
and the world.

she parts the blinds
with two delicate fingers
to glance outside.

pupils dilate
to soak it all in.

from the sigh of the
weeping willow
to the gentle curve
of the street

eyelids flutter fast
then tighten quick

sunspots bounce against the
backdrop of her heart.

her fingers return to fall at her side.
 

she finds comfort in the darkness
of her house
of this room
of her mind
 

of the distance she places between herself
and the
sunshine.

 

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

the sunshine has imbedded horizontal lines
against her skin;
violating the distance she has placed between
herself
and the world.

Wow what a gripping start to another fabulous piece... I like the use of the blind as the emotional wall being put up to keep the hurt out... sometimes our reaction is to just give in on feeling anything but we as humans if we aren't feeling then there is no reason to be alive so eventually we must open the blind and trust the sun to show us the light. I certainly do understand where those feelings come from though... and your writing again is well beyond me praise but I will say it, spectacular.

[Crap!]

Sunlight would actually cause her pupils to contract not dilate, that is why we squint into the sun, therefore if her room were dark as you would lead us to believe, this is a major reality flaw.
Other than that, the poem flowed quite well and had a nice lyrical tone to it.

[Luke Brooks]

the sunshine has imbedded horizontal lines
against her skin;
violating the distance she has placed between
herself
and the world.

You never cease to amaze me with your first lines.
This is probably one of my favorites of yours (or anybodys).

I could just visualize this whole piece while I was reading it.

sunspots bounce against the
backdrop of her heart.

Love it.

Wonderful job.
Another favorite.

[LUX]

beautiful..

[Jonathan Weiss]

Dark but beautiful......

[Robwills]

eyelids flutter fast
then tighten quick

sunspots bounce against the
backdrop of her heart.

The poet has obviously experienced all that she writes

[Ron Cole]

Excellent prose about reclusivity (even if temporary)! This work has great word pictures, and conveys the emotions of the subject as well! Nice work, Kara!

[Shannon K.]

Very good write here. The mix between love and dark/light. (That's what I got from it anyways.) Good description, and it flows together nicely.
Great job.
S.k.

[Paul Skyrm]

how the eye coils when faced with colossus.

[Huan !]

This poem is amazing. I especially like the last stanza. Though her world is filled with darkness, the light always somehow shines through.