my cherry

love and longing

Like a chocolate covered cherry, my heart has been waiting.

Like a chocolate covered cherry my insides grow weaker.

 

I wait for you and my sweetness turns bitter,

I try for you and my shell only hardness thicker.

 

I’m tired of false hope and disbelievers.

Why should I save myself any longer!!!

 

But still I wait, amongst the rest of the many flavors,

Until the day that I will be plucked by you...

The only one who will ever get to taste my cherry center.

Reviews

[Clockwork]

Nice underlying message in this one. I would change the font size in the final line of the piece to fit that in the other lines. I think you could take out the last line, or work it into the second line of the fourth stanza to fit with the other three stanzas before it. Well done.

[ebur™]

great poem! I thought the use of comparing your feeling to the cherry like a simile was well thought out and executed very well, and so much i enjoyed reading it as that. although the poem was kind of filled with a bit of anger and sorrow feeling, the mood was slightly lightened by the use of 'the cherry' simile. Well done! :)